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The Girl With a Blank Personality

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Todou Akira

PostPosted: Tue Sep 08, 2009 10:22 pm


Hi... Dont mind the title cause its the title of my first chapter... So, if anyone out there wants to read then go ahead. You can comment on it and it would help me if you can tell me what i need to work on Thank Yu~!
Note: I suck at english at school so the story might turn out funny. and the aligning is weird so sry... Oh and right now i am putting out the first part, so if you liked it then ask for the first chapter so i can put it out for u.


Prologue
How is your life? Good? Bad? Well I will take it that your life is good.
“That’s terrific!” I would say if my life were as good as yours. But it isn’t… What would you do if you had no family? I would go around saying nothing at all to anyone. I would wear all black everyday or if there was a school uniform, I would wear a black cape over it.
And how do I know this? Because I don’t have a family. Yep, sad isn’t it?
My dad died before I was even born and my mom died of a sickness after I got into middle school. I was sad but then I became happy again because my older brother and sister, who were twins, were there for me. But it all ended when…
They died in an accident after I finished my second year in middle school.
So now I live with my auntie and uncle, who are my only living relatives.
Currently, I am in my third year of middle school and it’s the last couple of days of school. My only friend is my teacher who is the only one nice to me. By the way, my name is Tsubaki Honda. And the story you’re about to hear is what I have to go through and about the person who probably changed my life when I entered high school…
PostPosted: Sat Sep 19, 2009 6:07 pm


The little girl seems jinxed in a way that all around her die. Is that your master plan? Do keep going though. It's quite good.

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PostPosted: Mon Jan 18, 2010 4:38 pm


it seems kind of like a cliche poor-unfortunate-girl story. it's well-written, but you could change the idea a little bit. and the last sentence has got to go. don't tell me you're about to tell me a story. just tell the story.
PostPosted: Tue Jul 06, 2010 4:46 pm


i think it sounds great and i would love to read more!!!

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