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Posted: Fri Apr 03, 2009 8:28 pm
As I Wake Up from my Long sleep. I head To school but then I thought Wait.......... A series of noise was getting louder and louder *BOOM* "RUN, RUN FOR YOUR LIFE!" A women says As I turn my head around I see these little creatures that look weird they look like objects that have been animated then all of a sudden BOOM! A Figure that looks like a drum had hit William
"Uhhhhh" William said All of a sudden William was floating in a dark abyss of no where And there was a blue crystal floating over him. There Was a voice
"You William, have been chosen to become The Destiny's Fate" "But why me?" William said "You were chosen because Every 10,000,000 years A Warrior has been Born to be raised by the guardians" "what guardians?" "Your Mother and Father" "But They died when I was Only 7 years old and i had been raised in an orphanage" "Yes, That Is true But They were looking down on you because they knew you were Destiny's Fate" William Had woken up He had realized that he was knocked out by that strange figure Then he took a look around him and saw fire and broken down buildings and creatures that were on ground "Wait Where are the other citizens?" As William Thought The April Fools parade So AS William was Running down the street he saw what had happened at the parade and figured He was too late Then He heard large thumps *THUMP* *THUMP* *THUMP* *THUMP* As William Turned Around He had saw a large Army Of figures that featured: -lawn gnomes -flamingos -garlic -taiko drums -kokeshi dolls
Then William had felt his number 1 instinct to RUN! Then he had thought the Train Station As he was running down to the under ground Train station He had hurried in to a train and the train started to move *chuga-chuga-choo-choo* William had fell asleep due to his exhaustion 5 hours later William Found himself still in the train he was wondering Who was conducting the train So William Was sprinting to the conductors room He had found a man with a ring in his palm
TO BE CONTINUED!!!!!!!
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Posted: Fri Apr 03, 2009 8:29 pm
can some one edit my story?
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Posted: Fri Apr 03, 2009 10:06 pm
question question question that was...a weird...weird story
creative, but very weird
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Posted: Fri Apr 03, 2009 10:52 pm
Ketsudan1589 question question question that was...a weird...weird story creative, but very weird writers block
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chrissy_of_hailfire Captain
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Posted: Sat Apr 04, 2009 1:41 am
I'm guessing its in its basic form. i went ahead and did a spell check on it for you.
as for formatting the post so its a little easier to read i would probably make some of the lines not have the hard enters, its an interesting format to read, and it does give off a fealing of chaos but its too confusing.
also the guardian issue is also confusing you might want to clarify it some more
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Posted: Sat Apr 25, 2009 5:32 am
It does make one think on what will happen next. 3nodding
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