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Posted: Sat Sep 15, 2007 3:12 pm
In the year 7.9ADC(after Demonia capital), In a complicated age a terrible weapon was created. Capable of killing anyone anywhere, anytime and any number. The king's long corrupt for quite a while, A boy with such strong amnesia that he does not remember his back ground as an exile in the country of worsening conditions is brought up under absolute surveillance, by the kings. He is general of god's army, But he was not really, a powerful figure in some ways controlling the destiny of his people yet heavily manipulated, into fighting wars' he would other wise not fight. Nearly unknowingly ordered the death of millions and then billions not asking why because of the quick amnesia that he suffers when anything bad happens from his rather depressing past before his first exile.
The entire royal family is captured, After the strong decision was made by him to rather fight the fascists, and prevent doom to the country, thou having thought the communists out of fear. as they are merciless especially to the most the highest of ranking people, and sadly non of them ranked low in the government, even the maid's where of suspiciously high rank for these people, arguments would not work, in any house, which the communists witnesses, at least any house of law. Those who order death to kill should be sacrificed in the name of life.(Being the appropriate metaphor however not politically correct.)
three relatively tall foreigners from the east, happening to also be the home of the wife of the son of the emperor mentioned before for his quick amnesias. Is protected by his maid under orders of his loving wife(as opposed to his farther who abused him…… i mean adopted…… and his adopted mother and other members manipulated by ministers'). He not remembering the crimes' however remembers his past, and their by, the new Communist government, knowing who he is, decides to set him free, quite quickly from the highest rank he is quite manipulatable and weak. He has a terrible lung cancer by this time from living in the capital close to a stall of dangerous biology effecting weapons. Hiding in a bunker like palace day and night. these are the last word's spoken
‘wʌ wä.’(you cared?)
‘wʌ’(I cared/their their……) [note that this mean's I understand their their, it's all right etc. More in depth explanation can be given by me sometimes latter during the role play]
in the back ground the tall health relatively mixed army in race and gender, had some members start talking to each other, trying not to upset the child, ‘ðüb-re-re rl-ɵ. ey-ni.‘(he has a lung cancer these are not good conditions) they say…… giving him appropriate care with the recourses they had…… al they could do was pat him on the back and try to make him feel better while the world collapsed during the time, wʌ-r.(he actually cared for the country).
your memories end, on that track, and you have to recall exactly what happened, for the purpose historical archive, it is actually known which date he died on and that he was living in exile for the rest of his life. but you are not informed of what happened after this event.
however you remember, having ordered the deaths of millions of people in-fact you have killed billions of people, and having killed thousands with your own hand's, trying to make sure you don't slip out the information and confess to the charges the other witnesses admit how many people you have killed and you know the rather large number(of 6-billion) is most likely more then true, knowing the person had witnessed the orders with his own eyes you try not to freak out.
———Other important notes:Actually as a witness you are close to the royal family and have ordered the death's of at-least five billion people all of whom are dead,(their very efficient. The population statistic still hasn't recuperated, the way the nation thinks about everything Is, slightly effected however small positive effects in terms of human rights did happen.).
Politics/History: The empire started after a rebellion of oppressed robot legion, the robot emperor took over however his reign was only for small period of time, However this is rather confusing history, the second husband of the empress, is then from another emperor who is the son of this emperor. Due to poverty in parts' an extreme Fascist faction came to power, thou de to an economic collapse the empire was not capable. Thou the Communist punishment is brutal, the battling against the communists takes a much longer time.(militarily it would also be suicide as the they have already thought nearly to the capital.) However it was considered a strong option, Refusing to fight against the communist because of hate from the Fascist party. He surrendered. Not knowing the results of future actions or non future actions. Only knowing that the information he has always gotten is inaccurate and his only accurate memory was the events in the Fascist zone.
Last but not least: historical effect on the fictional society: the trails, were the first trails to have executed so many murders' however, Because of the sheer number of people executed it would not be applied to even mass murder ever again. The execution became partially a resentment since people who where mentally insane where executed more then 1500 people were executed 1538(to be precise). The form of execution itself was latter considered more inhumane then more excepted forms so execution was banned in the resulting Communist states banning execution the environment was so heavily damaged in the forest region, that. The forests, was put under protection at all costs. And the native population, where thought in how to rear animals and how to disarm invaders,(other words rebel against invading army's). Littering in the forest is considered by them a crime again all creatures. the existing punishment for this crime will be enforced if you have caused enough damage. The nation has been relatively disarmed however… their nuclear armaments' are still great enough to destroy many planets' thou threats of nuclear war have reduced drastically since the time this story was based in hardly anyone anymore doesn't build a bunker that doesn't have a four meter wide wall around their house, of a bunker with walls spanning to up to more then fifty kilometers thick. Testing of weapons under water in the air of in space have also been banned. The state of human rights has in recent years due to the uproar in remarks from this time greatly improved. many of the abused political symbols are no longer directly correlated with the events of this time. Also the phrase ‘ta-tra-ne-ti dä ni.’ still has not lost it's fame, due to the severity of their actions they have become known as the suffering ones', most likely heavily incur-edged by the Bhudhists, which also happens to be a local religion. ‘ej-G dä-ni.’ has the same connotation, and is much shorter, and so has become the colloquial form of it.(making it also easier to translate.).
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Posted: Sun Sep 16, 2007 10:35 am
Organization can be very helpful in making complicated plots easier to follow
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School Of Dedicated RPers Captain
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Posted: Sun Sep 16, 2007 2:09 pm
(((Try to organize it better, I guess it's a bit of an advanced. PS:this is relativly hard compared to those thing's in my own forum……)))
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Posted: Sun Sep 16, 2007 2:49 pm
Alright, I'm going to move this to the Questions subforum (and PM you to let you know).
There are several ways to organize something like this. My personal advice is to start with big categories, whatever you do. I suggest that you give a lot more information on the place/setting. You've got some interesting history but it is just kind of thrown out there. You might want categories like:
Politics Religion Magic Important Places and of course, History.
Lastly, work on your punctuation and other technical writing skills. You should have capitals at the beginning of each sentence, for starters!
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School Of Dedicated RPers Captain
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Posted: Sun Sep 16, 2007 3:09 pm
Ignore what I just wrote yesterday…… lol I get pissed of when I'm a little stressed, It's just~~ Stress levels aren't very low, Recently,
care, is much longer then wʌ one short breath one word, sort stlye rl-ɵ sort of agresiv yet poetic, constant cluster– plus rare vowel.
Not actually poetic if you want to know not really art, but organ-breath(breath-organ)! I may change my mind about the actual word, but the baisic word used, is wʌ in the last scene which is the one where the entire story is based around. Othe rparts may be in the emperial dialect which is far to hard to comprehend for an advanced german let's just say if mark twain ever spoke it he would have a 100 book rant on how complicated it is, and it would still be on the best sellers list. lol .
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Posted: Mon Sep 17, 2007 9:39 am
Come on people at least some help (I am trying to implement it non the less.
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Posted: Thu Sep 27, 2007 10:13 pm
You Will Never Be A Man My advice, get rid of the alternate language. As cool an Idea as it is, it's just too hard for RPers to follow. Spelling counts, if you need to put what you wrote into Microsoft Word and run spell check. If you are using Firefox web browser it should do it automatically within the text box. Other than that I like the Idea and might join.
Unless You Are A Gentleman
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