First one is approved. For the second, we'll need it to function in structure exactly like the hazards guide. For example:
Primary: Internal (e.g. Inhalation) Dizzy Blurred vision Motor impairment: 2 doses Reaction impairment, Slightly descriptive: 2 doses Fine motor impairment: 3 doses Hand sign delay, Consumes 1 activation extra if using hand signs: 3 doses Unconsciousness: 4 doses
When trying to use/create a Hazard, please take a look at a Wikipedia or medical guide, and bring all of the effects into play. For fairness, each dose up to the final one usually contains at least 2 effects that the target can choose to be affected from. In our case, methane isn't currently on the Hazards guide, so when we're finished creating it here, it will be added to it in finality.
Posted: Sun Jul 02, 2017 10:48 am
Mattysandwich
All four approved, but please note that Crack the Whip will not be allowed to have an auto-grapple mechanic.
Technique Name: Methane Release Rank: B Type: Ninjtsu- Bloodline Element: Smoke Description: The user manipulates their chakra to convert their smoke to methane gas. The methane gas is a colorless, odorless gas that is released during the technique's usage that is highly flammable. The gas affects an area of four meters within the user's person. The longer a foe is exposed to the gas, the more inhibiting its effects become. The technique will not endure more than four posts before dissipating. Katon Ninjutsu used within the radius of the user's technique will ignite and end the technique, but cause a violent explosion that extends eight meters beyond the technique's normal radius. During this technique's usage, the user cannot perform other bloodline techniques unless specifically stated in the technique description. Primary: Internal (e.g. Inhalation) • 1 Dose Until Effect • Dizzy • Blurred vision • Motor impairment: 2 doses • Reaction impairment, Slightly descriptive: 2 doses • Fine motor impairment: 3 doses • Hand sign delay, Consumes 1 activation extra if using hand signs: 3 doses • Unconsciousness: 4 doses • Death: 5 doses
BlackFruity
Holy Rinaku
Posted: Sun Jul 02, 2017 12:23 pm
Kumurai Kaicho
Master's Threads: Approved. Mirage: Approved.
Needs work: Siphoning Strings: Bio-seeking is fine, but if you're looking for an A-rank drain, this technique will need to be A-rank. (and thus locked until Chuunin+ title rank) As for attaching to on-coming techniques, malformed/undefined, multi-object, or simply too quick techniques will be unaffected by the A-rank drain, so this part is denied. Arpeggio Strings: The shockwave feels too large for pure sound. Since it is sound based, and the canon A-rank sound technique requires a small room just to be effective for knocking a Kage and his crew into unconsciousness, I recommend asking for close range. (2 meters or less, from the strings) Also, since the Kugutsu strings are attached to your fingers, this will also always affect the user. Are you fine with this? Like the previous custom request, this one requires Chuunin+ due to rank restrictions. Forte Threads: This technique appears to be a near copy of Shinra Tensei. In referencing it, there's a 2 meters/rank, an S+rank learning blocker, and a Kage-only title restriction on it. Master of Manipulation: Malformed/undefined, and multi-object techniques will be unaffected due to their states. (e.g. 10 strings will find it difficult to attach to 11 flying kunai, more than 10 fireballs in a multi-fireball, or any part of say, Suzu no Oto's sound effect, a genjutsu, a fuuin, etc) Take note that manipulating still means that they're dangerous to you, as well. Since it requires the Human manipulation technique, this technique would be off-limits to Genin titled folks. Electromagnetism: How big, what does it look like, how does it transfer the electrical charge, etc? An EM field without definition will affect the entirety of the universe, invisibly. There's also the concern that using this technique will more reliably allow for rapid magnetic cooling, and the usage of ~3/4 of the universe's basic properties. >.< (I took a full year of EM classes, and know the full extent of its uses) As it is, I cannot in good faith approve this without superiorly major restrictions, which would destroy its intents.
Bomb tag creation: Bomb tags can be normally created ahead of time, using Formless and other methods. If you'd really want to perma-have a quick method for creating tons of E-ranked bomb tags, then approved. Otherwise, I recommend saving this custom technique slot for a different technique.
Counterfeit Cash: Nothing is foolproof, counterfeit-wise. When the shopkeeps catch on, expect repercussions! Approved. (I will go ahead and warn ya that Takumi had to update their fake currency detection due to a similar event)
Posted: Mon Jul 03, 2017 8:55 pm
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Was not sure about how much chakra each technique should cost.
Technique Name: Paper Ghost Rank: D Type: Genjutsu - Bloodline P/S. Sense: Sight // Sound Base Duration: // Upkeep: 3 posts 5 chakra Element: Paper Description: Activates upon seeing Atsuma perfom his bloodline jutsu. The afflicted will see Atsuma dissipate into a swarm of paper birds. While in reality he is somewhere else in the near vicinity.
Technique Name: Welcome To My World Rank: B Type: Genjutsu - Bloodline P/S. Sense: Sound // Touch Base Duration: // Upkeep: 5 posts 10 chakra Element: Paper Description: Activates upon hearing Atsuma play his flute. The world around the enemy becomes enveloped in paper. Atsuma has practically limitless control of the paper within the genjutsu. He may manipulate the world to attack the enemy with the paper, explosive paper and even restrain the enemy.
Technique Name: Mask of Death Rank: B Type: Genjutsu - Bloodline P/S. Sense: Touch // Sight // Scent Base Duration: // Upkeep: 3 posts 10 chakra Element: Paper Description: When a piece of paper from any of Atsuma Origami techniques sticks to the enemy this may activate. The paper will spread the opponents face and spread completely covering their face. Blocking both vision, breathing and hearing.
Technique Name: Show Me What Lies Within Rank: C Type: Genjutsu - Bloodline P/S. Sense: Sound // Touch Base Duration: // Upkeep: 3 posts 5 chakra Element: Paper Description: Activates upon hearing Atsuma play his flute. The afflicted will begin to see their body peeling away as if paper. They feel an odd sensation of pain as their body begins to blow away.
Technique Name: Origami Shinigami Rank: C Type: Genjutsu - Bloodline P/S. Sense: Sight // Sound Base Duration: // Upkeep: 3 posts 5 chakra Element: Paper Description: Atsuma gains the aspect of an ominous creature made out of paper. The being is so terrifying that the opponent loses 3 descriptive ranks in reflex and speed.
Technique Name: It slithers Rank: C Type: Genjutsu - Bloodline P/S. Sense: Touch // Sight Base Duration: // Upkeep: 3 posts 5 chakra Element: Paper Description: Activates only if the enemy has been cut by Atsuma's paper jutsu both in a genjutsu or in reality. Each cut will bring the afflicted a feeling as if something were crawling under their skin and festering in the wound. Upon the final post after activation, paper butterflies emerge from wounds covered in blood. The afflicted will look at their body and realize the places that the butterflies exited are now hollow as if they had eaten their muscles and meat for nutrients.
Technique Name: Brittle Rank: Passive Type: Genjutsu - Bloodline P/S. Sense: Sight and touch Base Duration: Until Element: Paper Description: Atsuma has a constant genjutsu around him that activates when the afflicted looks at him and hears him speak. His chakra has a reservoir of 100 chakra to maintain this genjutsu. This resevoir is not limited to this genjutsu, but the genjutsu itself is. Consuming 5 posts per activation any attack upon Atsuma will appear to have no affect and the afflicted area will fade away like paper. So if he gets stabbed the area where he is stabbed will become paper. He will still be stabbed, however.
Character: Sonyo Rue Technique Name: Medical Stasis: Internalized Disruption Rank: S-rank Type: Ninjutsu / Eiseijutsu Element: Hyuoton Description:An advanced and strictly offensive version of Medical Stasis, the user learns to focus the temperature dropping effects of the predecessor jutsu even more than before. This jutsu, unlike Medical Stasis, requires full physical contact ( a solid touch for several seconds ) to preform, and acts slower than it's sister jutsu. Upon contact to any part of the opponent's body, hyouton chakra strengthened by the effects of medical chakra floods the system. The internal temperature takes a serious drop, resulting in the beginning stages of hypothermia right away. After one post, the temperature drop doubles, causing severe hypothermia and starting the process of organ shutdown, starting with the lesser organs first. After the third post, the opponent looses consciousness and falls in to a coma. At the fourth post, typical means of revival fail; Eiseijutsu techniques of the same rank or lower no longer work to keep the afflicted alive. The fifth post brings death as the core temperature dips below the point of human survival, and the brain and heart cease to work. Upon death, the hyouton and eiseijutsu chakra mix is released and the entire body freezes solid.
I recommend the Radical Good Speed series to be compressed down into a single X-rank.
Technique Name: Radical Good Speed - Supersonic Rank: C Type: Ninjutsu Element: Jinton Description: During use of a Shunshin technique (any version) the Jinton user unleashes a sudden burst of extra chakra to break the sound barrier. A sonic boom follows the user, which will deafen anyone within twenty [20] feet during the movement and stun anyone within ten [10] feet of the user where they stop for one [1] post.
Technique Name: Radical Good Speed - Hypersonic Rank: B Type: Ninjutsu Element: Jinton Description: During use of a Shunshin technique (any version) the Jinton user unleashes a sudden burst of extra chakra to break the sound barrier. A sonic boom follows the user, which will deafen anyone within forty [40] feet and violently throw people/objects with forces capable of toppling trees.
Technique Name: Radical Good Speed - Ultrasonic Rank: A Type: Ninjutsu Element: Jinton Description: During use of a Shunshin technique (any version) the Jinton user unleashes a sudden burst of extra chakra to break the sound barrier. However, unlike its predecessors, this technique completely focuses all of its power. This allows the user to safely tear through obstacles in their path thanks to them "wearing" the carried broken sound barrier as a kinetic shield. Also, any sound made specifically by the user (not what they interact with) is delayed by one post.
Piercing the Veil: Approved. Speed Release: Rapid Reasoning: If by 'double', it means descriptives, how is this working? If one has 2 descriptives, is it bouncing to 4? If it means pure ranks, then each rank is naturally 1/2 of its superior. With the path Tai and Buki are going, I'd prefer the former, and if it is, then approved. Advanced Conditioning: For the moment, I need to have Ergo consult this technique.
Ergo War
Technique Name: Speed Release: Advanced Conditioning Rank: A Type: Training Element: Jinton Description: Unlike the usual speed and motion training shinobi perform to perfect their skills, a Jinton user may take it a step further by thoroughly applying their chakra during activities. Over time, their body will adapt to the stresses of super speedy movements allowing for moderately higher speed in all things they do. Must perform at least five [5] Jinton techniques in ten [10] different battles; also, must spend a total ten [10] posts training (out of combat) to practice relevant movements enhanced by one's speed (running, jumping, striking, etc.).
Posted: Tue Jul 04, 2017 8:06 pm
Kondo Kaicho
In general: Please choose Simple (stamina-only), Complex (1/2 stamina, 1/2 chakra), or Spiritual (chakra-only) for any tai or buki custom submitted. For now, I'll provide thoughts, and we can continue once they're resubmitted.
Lily of the Valley: Was this meant to be an X-rank? Also, there are plenty of techniques which require their own stances, so this technique would be invalid for using them.
Orchid: It seems to be a Spiritual technique, or minimally a Complex.
Poppy: Appears to at least be Complex. Also, with After Images, I'd like to see training done within its Style before this custom be learned. Otherwise, it's a solid custom for applying for.
Iris: Complex? Will also need the After Images style learned. For 'significantly', it sounds about the range of a 'Moderately' within our Descriptives. Due to the illusive nature of 'no activation paid', this part will be denied. The 'learns at B-rank' is unnecessary, unless the technique is going to be B-rank or X-rank, with the X-rank having a B-rank minimal possible usage.
Hachimon Conditioning: Due to the very nature of Hachimon's overwhelming presence, I must deny this. However, it was very nice to see someone try a custom for it!
Dandelion: Spiritual? When going up against B-ranked and lower chakra defenses, I can only assume that you'd want Spiritual, to keep from having the technique be defeated upon contact.
Welcome To My World: The upkeep appears to be a tad small. If it's adjusted to 20 chakra, then approved.
Mask of Death: The initial cost is fine, but such a vivid encounter will require a higher upkeep. 25 will do, and if agreed, then it's approved.
Show Me What Lies Within: If the upkeep is up'd to 10 chakra, then approved.
Origami Shinigami: Hm. I'd be more comfortable with 2 temporary decreases, and a limiter of only 1 shinigami being able to be active at a time.
It slithers: Approved.
Brittle: Many techniques can be made 'passive' by clever fuuin usage. Aside from this, I'm not sure how to read the latter half. (by itself, without the first half) It looks like a way to cover up wounds, but there's no actual chakra or stamina costs involved with this. As it is currently, I'll have to deny it.
Posted: Tue Jul 04, 2017 9:59 pm
Unless there are other objections, Speed Release: Advanced Conditioning is approved.
Technique Name: Radical Good Speed - Hypersonic Rank: X Type: Ninjutsu Element: Jinton Description: During use of a Shunshin technique (any version) the Jinton user unleashes a sudden burst of extra chakra to break the sound barrier. A sonic boom follows the user, which will deafen and stun anyone within range of where the user stops. It can violently throw people/objects with intense force at higher levels. The more chakra applied the greater these effects are. • C-Rank: 20ft Deafening Range, 10ft Stun Range, no throwing force effect. • B-Rank: 40ft Deafening Range, 20ft Stun Range, 20ft Throwing Force Range, Can Topple Trees • A-Rank: 80ft Deafening Range, 40ft Stun Range, 40ft Throwing Force Range, Can Topple Buildings
** Resubmitting the above technique as an X-Rank as suggested by AandOE.
Technique Name: Radical Good Speed - Rushing Return Rank: D Type: Ninjutsu Element: Jinton Description: The Jinton user performs the Return technique to speedily dash back to where they were when they activated the Shunshin technique. This technique cannot be activated more than 1 post after utilizing a Shunshin technique (any version).
Technique Name: Flower Girl Art - Eternal Spring Rank: E Type: Ninjutsu Element: Maruton Description: Utilizing one's talent in botany, they can concoct an herbal preserving fluid infused with their chakra. Doing so allows plants stored in it to greatly postpone effects of deterioration for long periods of time, even after being removed from the fluid. While its aesthetic purposes are clear, the user's chakra makes the plants more responsive to the user's chakra if used in certain techniques.
Technique Name: Flower Girl Art - Vibrant Display Rank: X Type: Ninjutsu Element: Maruton Description: After performing the necessary hand seals, the user can exert their chakra onto any or all flower petals that they have had soaked in the fluids of their own Eternal Spring technique. Doing so allows them to manipulate these petals in any of only three ways; must repay the cost of this technique for each manipulation or pay the difference to increase the potency of the active effect. The user may move petals with this technique through gestures of their body, such as their hands; E-Rank cost. They can harden the petals for defensive value, making them capable of blocking attacks up to the rank of chakra applied or simply weakening an oncoming attack. Or the user can sharpen the edges of the petals to allow for cuts on par with standard throwing ninja tools (kunai, shuriken, etc.) at its lowest level; C-rank minimum cost. Each effect can last no longer than 5 posts without repaying the cost to extend the duration. Learned at C-rank training tier. • Must know Flower Girl Art - Eternal Spring to learn/use.
