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 Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 5:40 pm
Hmm, alright. Edit: I just edited it and quoted you on my original character post, I'm lazy gonk xLieselotte Okay, there are a few changes that you may need to make before I can accept your character. First the flaws. Shapeshifting only into a crow is not a flow. It's just a limitation on your character's powers and is better off found at the skills and abilities section. What we are looking for are flaws on his personality that will negatively impact him when he is interacting with other characters. Also, just remember that if you choose to use having a temper as a flaw, that would mean he would have to get mad more easily than others and it wouldn't take long for someone to make him mad and the whole bad temper thing kind of contradicts with him being emotionless. Remember, flaws are something that are a regular occurrence for your character and is an issue that your character has to deal with constantly throughout the RP. Also, since you're going with just the bare minimum of flaws, you're going to really need to limit his abilities and get rid of a couple since he has a bit too many powers. Apparently he has the ability to move objects, as well as manipulate shadows and the moon, and also having the ability to levitate in the air and shape shift into a crow or raven is quite a lot. Once you change those, just quote me and I'll take another look. Also if you need any help with coming up with flaws, you're free to reference the Resources for better characters and coding subforum. There are resources there that you could look through that can help you and the Character Flaws - Doing it right thread also has a long list of flaws that you could choose from that could help serve to inspire you.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 6:14 pm
There are still some problems with his flaws. Flinching a lot doesn't really do much. Sure it will have other people give him odd looks, but they will probably ignore the flinching and just keep going. Like I said before, we usually look for character flaws that are flaws about your character's personality rather than their habits since their habits can easily be ignored and are usually considered cheater flaws since they don't show up or do much in the actually RP. And also, can you clarify how much power he draws from the moon? By the looks of it, he can't use umbrakinesis and lunarkinesis very well during the day, but when he can use it at night, there doesn't seem to be any limits on his power at all. Can you be a bit more specific? You also need to add limits on telekinesis. Like for example, how far does his telekinesis range? And it's fine what you do as long as you quote me so I know when you finish editing. XD
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 6:33 pm
Can awkwardness be a characteristic flaw? or intimidating? xLieselotte There are still some problems with his flaws. Flinching a lot doesn't really do much. Sure it will have other people give him odd looks, but they will probably ignore the flinching and just keep going. Like I said before, we usually look for character flaws that are flaws about your character's personality rather than their habits since their habits can easily be ignored and are usually considered cheater flaws since they don't show up or do much in the actually RP. And also, can you clarify how much power he draws from the moon? By the looks of it, he can't use umbrakinesis and lunarkinesis very well during the day, but when he can use it at night, there doesn't seem to be any limits on his power at all. Can you be a bit more specific? You also need to add limits on telekinesis. Like for example, how far does his telekinesis range? And it's fine what you do as long as you quote me so I know when you finish editing. XD
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 6:42 pm
There are some changes that you will need to make with your character. For one thing, Native American is a race not a species. So you will have to put down Shaman or maybe human for his species, but not Native American. Also, you will have to redo his flaws. Cannot being away from the wild for too long is not a flaw. Most likely he will probably avoid it if that's the case and it will rarely be seen in the RP. And I will have to veto the need for his tomahawk. You'll have to make some changes since weapons are not allowed in the school grounds unless they're on the training grounds. He'll need to leave his tomahawk in his dorm so it'll be impossible for him to be accepted into Rosentale if he really has to carry it around. I will accept not being sociable as a flaw. However, I'm not sure what you mean by when he is confronted he tries his best to stay away from the conversation. That just sounds like a repeat of his not being sociable. But you could also mean that when he is faced with hardship, he runs away. Being cowardly is a valid flaw and if that's what you mean by that, then that could work. Quote me when you make the changes and I'll take another look. You're free to use the Resources for better characters and coding subforum if you need help with building your character. There are many resources there that can help you. =D
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 6:44 pm
Andikork Can awkwardness be a characteristic flaw? or intimidating? Intimidating can't really be a flaw since usually it's better to leave it to the other RPers to decide whether your character is scary or not. Awkwardness can be a flaw, but because you character already has emotionless as a flaw, it might be a bit tricky to RP both together without excluding one of them. So you'll have to be weary of that. I hope these helped answer you questions. ^^
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 7:14 pm
xLieselotte There are some changes that you will need to make with your character. For one thing, Native American is a race not a species. So you will have to put down Shaman or maybe human for his species, but not Native American. Also, you will have to redo his flaws. Cannot being away from the wild for too long is not a flaw. Most likely he will probably avoid it if that's the case and it will rarely be seen in the RP. And I will have to veto the need for his tomahawk. You'll have to make some changes since weapons are not allowed in the school grounds unless they're on the training grounds. He'll need to leave his tomahawk in his dorm so it'll be impossible for him to be accepted into Rosentale if he really has to carry it around. I will accept not being sociable as a flaw. However, I'm not sure what you mean by when he is confronted he tries his best to stay away from the conversation. That just sounds like a repeat of his not being sociable. But you could also mean that when he is faced with hardship, he runs away. Being cowardly is a valid flaw and if that's what you mean by that, then that could work. Quote me when you make the changes and I'll take another look. You're free to use the Resources for better characters and coding subforum if you need help with building your character. There are many resources there that can help you. =D Okay done. Now i added another ability for one main reason. I needed a flaw. Also when i meant confrontational I was actually trying to clarify his inability to socialize.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 7:28 pm
Well if he has the skills of a fifth grader, I guess you could say he's illiterate or something like that and since this is a high school RP, it works as a flaw since his teachers will think he's the stupid. So to check to see if we're on the same page, these are his flaws from what I gathered from reading everything: 1. English, math, and science skills of a 5th grader 2. Gets distracted easily 3. Difficulty with socializing with others The adding of another ability is unnecessary. Usually when it's a setback on an ability, it's a limitation on the ability and not a flaw. The last part about his weather changing ability is better off found in the skills and abilities section since it isn't a flaw. Although I'm not sure if he'll ever get to use it since incorporating weather is a bit difficult in Rosentale since it's hard to get everyone to be on the same page when it comes to weather. So I want to see the flaws when you're RPing him or I will be calling you out about it and we will be back here discussing your character. Also if you make him extremely unsociable, it might be hard for the other characters to interact with him, so you'll have to be careful with that kind of character. Well, if you agree with everything that I have down, I'll assign him a dorm and he can be accepted. ^^
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 7:38 pm
xLieselotte Well if he has the skills of a fifth grader, I guess you could say he's illiterate or something like that and since this is a high school RP, it works as a flaw since his teachers will think he's the stupid. So to check to see if we're on the same page, these are his flaws from what I gathered from reading everything: 1. English, math, and science skills of a 5th grader 2. Gets distracted easily 3. Difficulty with socializing with others The adding of another ability is unnecessary. Usually when it's a setback on an ability, it's a limitation on the ability and not a flaw. The last part about his weather changing ability is better off found in the skills and abilities section since it isn't a flaw. Although I'm not sure if he'll ever get to use it since incorporating weather is a bit difficult in Rosentale since it's hard to get everyone to be on the same page when it comes to weather. So I want to see the flaws when you're RPing him or I will be calling you out about it and we will be back here discussing your character. Also if you make him extremely unsociable, it might be hard for the other characters to interact with him, so you'll have to be careful with that kind of character. Well, if you agree with everything that I have down, I'll assign him a dorm and he can be accepted. ^^ Yeah we're good. I thought through the social things so dont worry. He just doesnt like to talk with others. =] I did forget about the weather system incorporated in the guild. But yeah its good. I'll get the schedule and all set up.
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 7:43 pm
KI773RSHADOW xLieselotte Well if he has the skills of a fifth grader, I guess you could say he's illiterate or something like that and since this is a high school RP, it works as a flaw since his teachers will think he's the stupid. So to check to see if we're on the same page, these are his flaws from what I gathered from reading everything: 1. English, math, and science skills of a 5th grader 2. Gets distracted easily 3. Difficulty with socializing with others The adding of another ability is unnecessary. Usually when it's a setback on an ability, it's a limitation on the ability and not a flaw. The last part about his weather changing ability is better off found in the skills and abilities section since it isn't a flaw. Although I'm not sure if he'll ever get to use it since incorporating weather is a bit difficult in Rosentale since it's hard to get everyone to be on the same page when it comes to weather. So I want to see the flaws when you're RPing him or I will be calling you out about it and we will be back here discussing your character. Also if you make him extremely unsociable, it might be hard for the other characters to interact with him, so you'll have to be careful with that kind of character. Well, if you agree with everything that I have down, I'll assign him a dorm and he can be accepted. ^^ Yeah we're good. I thought through the social things so dont worry. He just doesnt like to talk with others. =] I did forget about the weather system incorporated in the guild. But yeah its good. I'll get the schedule and all set up. Okay. He can stay in the Tsavorite Dorm. ^^
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 7:48 pm
Is this alright, I edited it. but I'll post the "need fix" parts: Skills and Abilities: Telekinesis(he can only move inanimate objects), Levitation, Umbrakinesis(he can't keep a constant whisk of power in daylight, but emits/wields a more stable length of power but, not too much or he passes out of harnessing dark magic)/Lunarkinesis(he uses this ability to draw power from the moon, but not to "heal" him or any nonsense like that). Character Flaws: Impatient, trust issues, and Emotionless at times. (Gosh this is tedious! Oh and I like your signature * u *)
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 7:50 pm
Okay, he's accepted. He can stay in the Malachite Dorm. Remember to put his profile in the accepted character profile subforum and get him signed up for classes. Also right now the school is having a winter field trip, so you'll need to post at the lantern festival thread when you start RPing. Today is the last day and tomorrow will be a normal Rosentale day. EDIT: Oh and thank you! heart
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 7:58 pm
OH YUSSSSSS. emotion_brofist Hmm, I see thank you for reminding me! A winter field trip? How cool!~ Okay, got it. (No, problem-o :3) xLieselotte Okay, he's accepted. He can stay in the Malachite Dorm. Remember to put his profile in the accepted character profile subforum and get him signed up for classes. Also right now the school is having a winter field trip, so you'll need to post at the lantern festival thread when you start RPing. Today is the last day and tomorrow will be a normal Rosentale day. EDIT: Oh and thank you! heart
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Posted: Sun Mar 25, 2012 8:15 pm
Great job so far! But before I can accept, I need you to clarify some things for me. For her abilities, you'll need to be more specific than just magic because I don't know if you mean she can summon monsters from the dead or do elemental magic or can make flowers and sparkles appear out of nowhere. Also, you will probably need to put up more information about her familiar since you'll probably also RP Nyx as a character as well as Alice. If you can clarify that, then we can accept her.
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