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Elen_Gilthoniel Vice Captain
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 Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 11:22 am
Hello again. =) I'm afraid I can't approve this character without you adding some real flaws. Here are the problems with the current ones. 1. He's a vampire. Wanting blood isn't any more a flaw for him than it's a flaw for a Human to crave a hamburger or salad. It's a natural biological response. Natural instincts do not count as flaws. 2. You say he deeply loves his fiance, but will cheat on her. Frankly, that doesn't make sense. People who truly love someone else don't intentionally hurt them and lie to them. Disloyalty hurts people. And being flagrantly, horribly traitorous to friends and supposed loved ones is not a quality a "kind" and "too caring" person has--disloyalty stems from selfishness, not selflessness. Remember that the flaws need to be cohesive with the rest of your character. You can't throw in a flaw that doesn't really jive with the rest of the personality. Something has to give. 3. "Too Caring" is not a flaw. "Too nice" "Too beautiful" "Too smart"---any time you give your character a good quality and try to turn it into a flaw by saying they're just "too much" of that, it's not going to work. Finally...I'm a little iffy on....how does healing with shadows work exactly? It's basically normal healing except there are somehow shadows involved in the process?
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 11:42 am
StrawberryZ0mbie Hello again. =) I'm afraid I can't approve this character without you adding some real flaws. Here are the problems with the current ones. 1. He's a vampire. Wanting blood isn't any more a flaw for him than it's a flaw for a Human to crave a hamburger or salad. It's a natural biological response. Natural instincts do not count as flaws. 2. You say he deeply loves his fiance, but will cheat on her. Frankly, that doesn't make sense. People who truly love someone else don't intentionally hurt them and lie to them. Disloyalty hurts people. And being flagrantly, horribly traitorous to friends and supposed loved ones is not a quality a "kind" and "too caring" person has--disloyalty stems from selfishness, not selflessness. Remember that the flaws need to be cohesive with the rest of your character. You can't throw in a flaw that doesn't really jive with the rest of the personality. Something has to give. 3. "Too Caring" is not a flaw. "Too nice" "Too beautiful" "Too smart"---any time you give your character a good quality and try to turn it into a flaw by saying they're just "too much" of that, it's not going to work. Finally...I'm a little iffy on....how does healing with shadows work exactly? It's basically normal healing except there are somehow shadows involved in the process? I will delete the profile and try again later when I have more time...
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 2:59 pm
 Character Information:
Student Name: Max
Species: Angel
Age: 16
Gender: Male
Personality: Kind heart: Would help anyone who came to him for help. Egotistical: He always believes that he is better then the rest. When he helps someone with his Kind heart, in his mind he thinks he is better then them because they asked for his help.
Bio: Max was literally the one who fell from heaven. One day in the high courts of Heaven, Max was on trial for: failing to protect his mortal. His mortal was killed in action as he ran from robbers, and Max was in charge of keeping him safe. But Max being max decided that his mortal ego was to big and it clashed with his egotistical side, so he left him to die, thinking he can get away with it. The high courts found out what he did and deemed him unworthy of Heaven. But they could not strip him of his powers, so they granted him One Time only healing power, that he can use on one person. To redeem himself Max must get past his egotistical side. this action caused Max the fear angels, because they were the ones who turned on him, who refused to feed his ego. Who betrayed him and made him suffer for his crime. So he was dropped from Heaven and landed outside of the Academy. The high courts hoped that the Academy will help him grow and break out of his current mind set. Until the day he changes, Heaven will not allow him back in.
Skills and Abilities: Healing Touch: Being a angel, he was granted a ONE time use ability to heal anyone he so choose to heal. Once he begins the healing process, he will lose the ability and be normal with no skills or abilities.
Character Flaws: self centered: Stemming from his egotistical personality, Max is self centered and despite his Kind heart, will only think of himself at times. .angelphobic: The fear of angels. Even though he is a angel, he has a great fear of them, because he believes he is the best of them all.Distracted- Max is constantly being distracted by his own thoughts and peers. He loses focus fast, and in serious cases, will completely blank out.
Sexual Orientation: Bi sexual
Status: Single
Likes: (at least 3)
-helping others
-feeding his ego
-expanding his horizons (experimenting with life)
Dislikes: (at least 3)
-aggressive personalities
-over achievers
-spiders
Extra Information: (optional) If there's anything that you want to add that doesn't belong in any of the categories given.
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 3:02 pm
that picture... for a second I thought I was tripping out @__@
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 5:35 pm
I'm sorry but the picture is a bit distracting. Can you make it not move? It might disturb some of the other RPers. Blasphemer cannot becount as a flaw. He talks bad about his creator, but it's not really something that would really negatively impact him when interacting with others. Sure the ones who believe will not like it but the majority of the people in the RP aren't exactly pious. We do have a few angels in the RP, and I can count that as a flaw, but I want to see it in the RP, okay? Lots of people try to put fears as flaws so they don't have to RP them, but that's not the point of flaws. They help give a character more personality and make them more interesting. Once you fix the flaws, I'll accept him. ^^ Oh and make sure not to neglect your other character when you make new characters!
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 5:49 pm
 Character Information:
Student Name: Aoni Arembur
Species:Human
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Appearance description: (optional) This is just in case you have a picture but you want to verify some differences like "The picture has red eyes, but my character has blue." Or if you just want to add extra detail, you can do that too.
Personality: Very energetic and happy-go-lucky. Tries everything, when not tinkering on some new device, to make everyone in the general vicinity happy. Loves meeting new people and showing off his inventions.
Bio:As a young child Aoni had always shown prowess in technology, figuring out the family computer better than his parents at the age of five. Throughout his childhood he was left without toys numerous times because his inquisitive mine would bring him to take them apart and re-assemble them into something better. He would then proceed to give these super-toys to less fortunate children at his school. He quickly found that this made him happy, so he continued to do so throughout his life, inventing and refining household items to make them more efficient.
After researching colleges on the internet he stumbled upon this one, he hopes he is accepted soon as he is ready to share his inventions with the creatures of all worlds.
Skills and Abilities: A self proclaimed,Techonopath. Aoni has no problem assembling and dis-assembling anything technological, he often finds new uses for old devices, but that is usually after some tinkering.
Character Flaws:
Invention OCD: Before Aoni can reveal his inventions to anyone he has to be sure that they will work flawlessly and impress said person or people, which often results in hours of fine-tuning.
Absent-minded: Aoni will generally space-out into nothingness and just stare off into the distance, often thinking about new devices he can make.
Workaholic: When Aoni starts tinkering, which is an awful lot, he often times will work well into the night, usually until he passes out from lack of sleep.
Sexual Orientation:Straight
Status: Single
Likes: (at least 3)
- Penguins
- Caffeine
- Scraps of Machines
Dislikes: (at least 3)
- Anger
- Sleep
- Smoking
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 5:52 pm
Alright I added a Flaw: Distracted: Yes its a flaw for him because he can lose total focus in class and in general. This can be serious in a situation when he needs absolute focus. I promise not to neglect my other character and I will show the angelfobic side of my character smile
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 5:54 pm
First I want you to explain his first flaw to me. Does that mean he gets angry easily? Because if he "hates being angry" that would mean he would avoid getting angry which pretty much mean the first flaw would rarely be seen. If that is the case, you might want to look for a different flaw since that won't be able to be accepted. ^^
Other than that, everything looks good. Once you explain to me what the first flaw means or if you change it into a valid flaw, he'll be accepted. =D
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 6:00 pm
Liontamer18 Alright I added a Flaw: Distracted: Yes its a flaw for him because he can lose total focus in class and in general. This can be serious in a situation when he needs absolute focus. I promise not to neglect my other character and I will show the angelfobic side of my character smile
He's accepted. He'll be staying in the Malachite Dorm.
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Posted: Thu Feb 23, 2012 6:19 pm
XPKamzX I have changed said flaw. If there is anything else please tell me biggrin
He can stay in the Malachite Dorm!
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 1:09 pm
Name: Shadow Linux
Species:Human
Age: 18
Gender: Male
Appearance description: take out the white hair and add black, and imagine him a couple years older.
Personality:A nice guy overall and is usually very friendly to those around him. Can be very over-protective to those close to him and he is excells in in combat with dual wielding blades and archery.
Bio: Shadow was raised in an orphanage after both of his parents in a hunting accident. He was eventually adopted by a hunter and was taught basic hunting and survival skills. Growing up he mastered fighting with blades and found he was very good at archery since he hunted to survive.
When he was in school he was that kid that noone ever wanted to be around would never say hi to, that changed when he entered high school. His high school years he made a few friends and knew he would eventually have to leave them. his sophmore year his best friend was killed in a rockslide and shadow never recovered. He eventually began to suffer from schizophrenia.
Skills and Abilities: Excells in combat with any weapon that can be used in 2s, and excells in Archery. he is also good at playing the Ocarina.
Character Flaws:
-Stubborn
-Absent Minded:is distracted easily as he grew up a hunter.
-easily becomes unstable and insecure in unfamiliar circumstances or situations
Sexual Orientation:Straight
Status: Single
Likes: (at least 3)
-Hunting
-Duelling
-Music
Dislikes: (at least 3)
-People that act like idiots
-Being told hes wrong
-Not being able to hunt
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Posted: Fri Feb 24, 2012 1:27 pm
Hello! There are some problems with your character that will need to be fixed before you can begin RPing. First of all, unfortunately, the picture you want to use is already in use by another player so you will need to choose something else. As far as his flaws go...suffering from a mental disorder is not a flaw, per se. If he is violent or out of touch with reality though, those qualities can be flaws. Is he medicated for his schizophrenia? If not...why? Being over protective is not really a flaw as you describe it. Defending people and being self sacrificing are not vices--they are virtues. Please work out the issues and quote me when you have fixed it. =3
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Elen_Gilthoniel Vice Captain
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