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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 12:05 am
Westonian But if Ian is wounded, then back-steps and prevents his younger self from being wounded, does the time-travelling Ian remain wounded? Or did the unwounded Ian then pop back in time to prevent himself from being wounded?  Ian1 and Ian2 exist on two different timelines. Only for the thirteen seconds after Ian1 jumps back in time do the two share a timeline. Prior to and after that period, they exist on separate timelines.
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 5:06 am
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 5:38 am
Oh, that was good.
I have to say, I thought very well of the West/Blue fight: that was definitely very well done.
The Cal/Wyndi (Wyndi's Windy Powers? 4laugh ) fight was interesting too, given the twist: that definitely did well to emphasize the anti-Aberrant movement. 3nodding
And if you were worried about dialogue: I certainly thought it flowed well enough.
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 6:54 am
The shadow of Ian's past. Fascinating.
Forced innovation through combat. Again, why are people surprised with the problems that happen later?
I wish I had more intelligent things to say. I keep posting so you know I've read and love it. I hope to give a thorough analysis once the story's done, and I've read everything from beginningto end.
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 8:46 am
Yeesh. I can see why the students are afraid of Cal. Or, if not afraid, distantly respectful. Could make a fair assassination technique, were one so inclined.
Weston so could've taken him if he'd watched his footwork. And if, y'know, damage to the surroundings wasn't a factor. Or damage to Mr. Levesque. Good matchup, though. I like how you handle action with the creative powers - vacuum punches are very nice. I'd wondered if Weston could generate a vacuum.
Hammond is developing a new level of scary with his thought on the Movement.
Random thoughts: Does Weston ever play with airborne bubbles in his spare time? If Michael were to open a restaurant and chop with his hands, would the health inspector approve?
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 8:49 am
Westonian Yeesh. I can see why the students are afraid of Cal. Or, if not afraid, distantly respectful. Could make a fair assassination technique, were one so inclined. Cal...? Do you mean Ian? Michael? Cal didn't really use his powers. O_o
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 9:39 am
Bweheheh, guts & gore & trauma, oh my!
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 10:00 am
Can Michael form things other than weapons with his hands?
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 10:57 am
I really, really liked that look into Ian's past. What a scene for a horror movie, though.
*kiss... kiss... GIBBITS*
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 12:05 pm
Arcadian I really, really liked that look into Ian's past. What a scene for a horror movie, though. *kiss... kiss... GIBBITS* The window shatters, then splatter splatter There's nothing better than to watch a head explode
This is... the best... I've ever seen (she's just a teen) I wanna see it again and again and again!Damn, I need to steal that CD so I can put that song on my computer
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 1:03 pm
Ruevian Westonian Yeesh. I can see why the students are afraid of Cal. Or, if not afraid, distantly respectful. Could make a fair assassination technique, were one so inclined. Cal...? Do you mean Ian? Michael? Cal didn't really use his powers. O_o Eeeee... crap. Ian. The telefragger. Or chronofragger. Either or.
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 1:11 pm
Westonian Ruevian Westonian Yeesh. I can see why the students are afraid of Cal. Or, if not afraid, distantly respectful. Could make a fair assassination technique, were one so inclined. Cal...? Do you mean Ian? Michael? Cal didn't really use his powers. O_o Eeeee... crap. Ian. The telefragger. Or chronofragger. Either or. That seems like a really interesting use of ability, so long as you're not trying to get to second base when it happens. sweatdrop xd Rowan/Hammond?!? *is teh scared*
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 3:31 pm
William Black Rowan/Hammond?!? *is teh scared* Don't be ridiculous. Hammond is a Drain Alpha. That thrill he feels is probably just a portion of Rowan's power being drained when she touched him. Then again...
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Posted: Mon Oct 17, 2005 11:22 pm
xd I really wish the school laptops didn't block Gaia or that the mitsukake server would let me get on guilds!
Ah well, here is my review of the first nine chapters! But now I'm going to have to read the profiles already offered, so just ignore my comment about profiles already there. sweatdrop
Chapter 1 - ooh! A Military story start. I lived in New Mexico once, I wonder where it landed and who was in it. This was suppose to stay hidden? Are they trying to prevent panic? Contamination? Of the body or is there something else a bit scarier carried by the plane? Oh wow! I didn't even see the dates! That part happened far into the past... I wonder if this will be a story that goes back and forth in time to reveil things... That would be really cool! How old are these girls? They cannot be of college age, since one girl still depends on her father... They must be in their late teens judging by their food choice and the time of day. It is cute that one of the friends treated out the other. HOMG. T___T The car is going to hit her! Damn those cell phone drivers! And then Icy gets lost. o.o She she a mutant? With powers like those... Wait... That body... Did it pass on some type of chemical that didn't show until generations later? *ponderponder* ;__; They way she says them kind of makes me set in that thought. How sad! Her friend just saved her life and all she can think about is that she is different!
Chapter 2 - Ooooh! It is a skip around time story! This will make us have to piece the puzzle together! heart Strange but useful? Run lil girl! RUN! ;__; Oh no! Whatever they are doing, it cannot be good! ;-; Jason seems to be a very kind hearted man. Almost 50 years since we last saw Pryce. And what is this project for...? Why do they need people? I wonder of Rowan is the little girl from eariler. If so, at least she is alive. Homg, she has more of an effect on the world by 20 years of life then towns do in their entire history! There by the eyes, but not be machine... interesting. O-O She will kill to protect herself. Smart move, but eye opening. And now she has to give up her usefulness on the field to train the next generation... Is this the Jason from eariler?! T____________T Why did she have to kill him!? Why!? Oh gods how sad!
Chapter 3 - Disarmingly? Something seems fishy now... Pryce again! I'm starting to wonder about this character. I wonder if we'll ever learn more about Jason though... Aberrants = Mutants? And this earily on they know of them? And then we find out there are ALIENS! =O And whoabuddy! Pryce = always young from now on? o.o So, he is the perfect man for the job. Jump to before the assination but after the friend event, and screamers are many? Alpha? They rate them? I wonder what the rating system is... I am guessing basied on power and that Alpha is pretty high up. Hee hee. He seems to depend on her. whee
Chapter 4 - HA! It was aliens! >x3 And homg, they are scared of more aliens? o-o; Pryce rarely smiles? How sad! ;-; And Project Blue sounds interesting... Much eariler then the screams now! How sad... a young lad that sees the school not as a place to grow, but as a prison... Wow! Weston is smoooooooth in this! Meghan ought to know why the smart ones are lazy! XD Sokol? What a name! xd And wow, this teacher has a heck of a temper! o-o; Alert.... While half asleep. His character is going to be awesome to follow! Held back because he doesn't show motivation. Doesn't show motivation because he isn't challanged. How is someone to grow without adversiry? It is a vivious cycle!
Chapter 5 - Wee! We learn how they are grouped! Noticable but harmless? And strong news control over this... Amazing! What a cover up story and that would tackle the Bible Belt badly that this was evolution based change. Shame that so many of them die and those that don't are scarred. Post the scream case in the start; summer is over. Kevin really hates school. Robin really cares about class. HOMG he turns into a she!! O___O WHOA. Dave? Mmhmm... This Kevin guy really likes to mess with people. xD HOMG! xd That is awesome! He was able to smell the sex of the person! heart That was just such an awesomely funny scene.
Chapter 6 - Who is this mysterous boy with sad eyes? And wow, they tell the parents their child is dead?! o___o;;;; I wonder what the special needs are... Rowan is back! And Gendou is in the story? I wonder if it is the sad child from eariler. ;-; Oh gods how sad! That is why parents shouldn't force to hard! >XO Smart, and keeps away from others. Totally alone. What a sad sweet child. Rowan worries about her student. I wonder if the school has a kill or be killed feel to it. After her loss of a friend, she is too scared to speak! yikies! gonk HOMG! She complete destoried his body yet her friend was still alive!? How does that work!? It isn't the class itself but the teacher that she wants to expose Jillian to? Is she against Betas in general? Does she think they will slow her down? Wolfboy!! heart *ahem* >>; xD Someone that needs to turn into a girl to do anything well! <3 This amuses me greatly. WHOA West is a power house! eek Awww... how sad, they are sabotating the Aberrant's chance of mixing with the public happily. Amazing... having people notice or not notice her on command. Is Micheal the name of Greenie? heart That sense of Honor seems to say so. And a Choas Alpha... Sounds scary to deal with... o-o;;
Chapter 7 - Hmmm... Not too far in the past now. So we are trying to move up with the first part of the past at all times? So, teaching is like a step down in their way of life? Though it would make sence to try to get teachers that have been in the field. hee hee! How cheeky of him to say such a thing! whee What an interesting school system! eek I'd love to try for a school like that! heart heart It would make class more interesting. The holdouts? Those that would not smile at Rowan? <3 How cute that Weston is so interested. It is fun reading about him since he is always so bored. xD Meghan seems to be very easily affected by her emotions. And Rowan nervous in front of youngings? Amazing. HOMG. Amy is just a darling lil girl! heart heart heart And now I know where that quote came from in someone's sig! sweatdrop Micheal is a harsh real life type person. A downer for the class, but at least it sparkes debate, that is good for the class over all. Yay! Gendou is interested in class. I wonder who the rarity is. And why it is hard for Abbarrents to have children together. Can they breed with the normals easily? If abbarrents are to be the next level of humans, and they have a hard time breeding, then maybe human popluation would go down world wide. o.o Radical politics are scary to Icy. ;-;
Chapter 8 - Who killed their father? o-o; xD Usagi is the Doctor, isn't she? I love how she cursed after he left. It is terribly cute. <3 o-o;; Why won't they let him take biology? Why doesn't he think she ought to take chemistry? gonk I think a character profile would be terribly helpful. I ought to make one on scratch paper the next time I read one of these stories. xP Did Robin find the original version of Coco-Cola or one of the new ones? xD o-o I wonder why the bright and bored Weston is doing poorly. *shivers* Gendou's character can scare someone even in the middle of the day surrounded by people! o-o;;
Chapter 9 - Code names? Doll? Interesting... Ooh my! A ten years difference yet there is love or at least liking. <3 How terribly sweet. What happened to those last three?! O_O;; Wow... Matt looked like he had a hard time. o.x; I wonder what his manifested day was like. I wonder if this Amy is the same Amy on the DYBIMs... o.o And what made her blush!?
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Posted: Tue Oct 18, 2005 12:39 pm
Oh dear, I feel negligent now. I should write up something nifty, but I don't know what to say.
Thanks for the timeline, that was helpful. I always get confused when time-travel is involved.
heart Keep writing wonderful stuff!
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