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 Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2012 9:59 am
Long ago a Villain named "Z" appeared and tried to Conquer the Plain of Existence with the power of Darkness.He was stopped by the Keybladers of Old.The first band of Keyblade wielders that grouped together and fought the darkness.the battle went on for several years until "Z" the leader of the darkness fell when he was betrayed by his second in command Cog.He fought "Z" and bested him Sealing him away.The Keyblade Wielder thought the battle was over until Cog appeared wielding the first X-Blade.The Keyblade wielders fought Cog but could not beat him.the leaders of the light planned an all out strike against him.the battle seemed like the winner would be Cog and his new army of dark keybladers.until "Z" appeared and fought alongside the Wielders of Light.Together they bested Cog.he was destroyed by the powers of both light and dark.The Leaders of Light and Z destroyed the X-Blade and parted ways.one of the leaders of light went on to create the Keyblade Academy that is now the Order of the Keyblade.A place where users of both light and dark train to up hold the Plain of Existence.
100 years after the battle with Cog the Plain of Existence has become almost completely peace except for some dark blade gangs causing the occasional trouble in towns.The Order of the Keyblade and the Twilight Guard.(A group of normal humans using modified weapons to fight darkness) try to keep the peace.But darkness is returning slowly and the Leaders of the Order are beginning to worry if the coming darkness has something to do with "Z" returning to conquer the Plain of Existence....
What do you guys think?
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2012 10:42 am
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2012 1:02 pm
Okay well this is a place to brainstorm ideas so....yeah thats alright.Anybody else?
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2012 2:54 pm
I like the story line It is very interesting but needs some modifying.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2012 3:43 pm
There was a time when no evil was spread throughout the world. Everyone's hearts were separate, though everyone shared the idea of peace. Peace was the one thing that tied everyone, and every world together. No one knew the meaning of the word evil, or the feeling of overtaking darkness. No one waged war, no one forged weapons, and no one talked bad about others. It was truly a separate but peaceful world.
This all was thrown out of balance by one man. One man, who found the world dull and boring in its state of peace decided to ponder the existence of good and evil. The man found himself unlocking the hidden parts of human emotion, parts of his heart that were different than what the world found acceptable. So he explored it, caressed it, and released its hold onto himself. Thus created the darker side of human emotion, sin. When the man released the darkness in his heart the humans of his world outcasted him, and shunned him. This detachment from society caused the man great grief, and sent him toward his own destruction. He ended his life.
With the release of the first tainted heart our story begins. That first heart, the heart that connected the separate worlds. This first heart of darkness created the first heartless of the world. With this heartless came a plea to the darkness of the hearts of the rest of mankind. This darkness pooled together as more and more hearts were slain by the first seed, sending their souls sky high forming, Kingdom Hearts. This dark realm pulled on the hearts of the last remaining untainted hearts of the world, trying to corrupt their minds and body.
The light within the peoples hearts took form to combat the darkness. This was the first ever record of the power of light rising to combat the darkness. Peoples hearts took the form of keys which could be used to lock the darkness of the worlds away and maintain the stability of the worlds itself. But with the creation of Kingdom Hearts and the key's came a new reality, the barriers keeping the worlds separate were now open, and the darkness spread just as fast as the light which rose to defend the people. You are those chosen by the darkness or light. With the formation of the first keyblades and primitive heartless we must take up arms and defend the worlds, at the cost of our own sanity. Will the keyblade wielders become masters of the worlds? Or will the darkness remain eternal? It's up to you.
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Posted: Wed Jul 11, 2012 5:06 pm
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Posted: Fri Jul 13, 2012 10:47 am
I already told my idea to Third Essence, so if you guys want to hear it, just say so. Anyways, Both ideas need some SERIOUS tweaking. Im kind of Sick of having these uber overpowered characters on both sides. It sort of kills the whole mood of "OMFG This is impossible!". It should only be a powerful villain. Anyways, now I have a urge to express my idea. Lol.
Okay, it is never full revealed where Keyblade has came from right? Well, what if the Nobodies had found a map, leading to clues to a world known as the Forge. The Forge, was inhabited by a omnipotent beings known as the "Creators." The creators, forged the Keyblades, and spread them among the worlds to help them fight the darkness. After seeing their jobs done, they soon flew to the furthest rings of the Universe, never to be seen again. There was an unforeseen consequence though. They had not expected man to craft the necessary technology to reach the Forge.
So, a new Organization XIII is formed, and what they plan to do, is create a army of Keybladers to destroy the heartless themselves, and eventually rule all the worlds. This is a race to see who can reach the forge first, the good guys hoping to destroy it.
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 8:28 am
I'm going to give my full opinion on all three of the stories
1.) Essence's
This story is a continuation of the original storyline of this guild which sadly the guild died and this storyline could also die I say we move in a different direction and see what we find. I really don't have much to say on my scale I would give it 6/10
2.) Shin's
I do like Shin's Idea its original and as I read it I wanted to keep reading we need stories like these to keep people interested and want to keep coming back for more the downside is as goose said no one that is not the leader of the group wants to go head to head against the leader of the opposite team it feels like a hopeless battle and annoys role-players who are just starting out they just can't win against a seasoned role-player and then they get frustrated and quit. I say for Shin's story we introduce a new type of leader for both sides "The light and the darkness" What people hear in their hearts is what moves them forward and keeps the fighting and power rating in the correct area. My rating 8/10
3.) Goose's
not to be rude but I read this and got so bored I had to go outside and smoke it has potential but you need to unlock it find what it is and you will have a great storyline. but back to my opinion if we destroy the "Forge" no new keyblades could be made and what if the heartless come back years down the road no protection and the darkness wins. Bad. to creat a good storyline you need to think ahead what happens after the "Forge" is destroyed "Well that was fun game over new story." Now understanding what you do in the story and its effects on the future of the story after the main completion of the story arch that is what it takes to understand writing and understand plot writing. My rating 3/10
Again I'm not trying to be rude I'm just a slight bad mood due to the fact I dropped a bowling-ball on my foot and it still hurts but I digress tweak the stories a bit and we'll see what we have.
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 11:24 am
Yea keyblades are forged within the hearts of the user, so anyone making keyblades are making fake keyblades.
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 11:26 am
Well the idea of my story is that everyone is starting from the beginning and no one would be an overpowered "leader" and we would all reach that stage at about the same time near the end as masters.
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 11:40 am
Shin 100% agree that would mean people of most levels can enjoy this rp without the "I can't win no matter what." effect going on which is good I think we might have our storyline all we need to do now is run it by Essence and get his approval.
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2012 4:48 pm
NOT SO FAST.......
You guys forget we must vote for the things we want in this guild so yeah Vote people. and just because Hinote Shins' got a vote we still have other people in the guild that need to vote soooooo yeah don't jump to any conclusions yet people...this race aint over.
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Posted: Sun Jul 15, 2012 1:13 pm
The more interactive a story is, the more a player feels involved within the development of that story entirely, they become immersed into a world they're taking part in.
That and it does simplify things to a familiar ground when the sides are split into two or three factions to pick from, variety is the spice of life'n'all that..So in that case I vote for Hinote Shin's.
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Posted: Sun Jul 15, 2012 7:22 pm
Well since everyone wants Hinote's Story i guess we've got a winner.Congrats Hinote Shin.
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Posted: Tue Jul 17, 2012 9:49 am
The-Third-Essence Well since everyone wants Hinote's Story i guess we've got a winner.Congrats Hinote Shin. You are the Captain, but try to take into account what I said alright man? Make your members feel wanted and important in the world by giving them the freedom to make decisions and effect the plot at hand. Rather then a straight line that is both strict and much like a bland story. Free Roam is where it is at.
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