As a first poem, this isn't bad at all.
But, just to clear up a few possible misconceptions: You do not need to start each line with a capital letter. Words following semi-colons shouldn't be capitalized unless they're proper nouns. Also, each line doesn't have to be a contained unit. Each of your lines is end-stopped, meaning they end with the conclusion of a phrase and with punctuation. End-stopping definitely has a place in poetry, but I think in your particular poem, it makes the content seem a bit stiff and over-structured.
The alternative is enjambment, which allows your thought to continue onto the next line without any necessary punctuation on the end. This allows more room to play with sentence structure, lengthy metaphors, punctuation within a line, etc., etc.
Examples
End-stopping:
"I was careful to love you;
But my fear ran off,
We were so magical;"
Enjambment:
"We were so
........................far apart,
our bodies unable to touch.
I cried for you
and your voice."
Also, you make a lot of straight forward statements. ("I've loved you so," "I saw you, you came closer"
wink . These short statements can be powerful and provide emphasis to particular aspects of a poem. But, I think the poem could use some more tangible imagery instead. You don't need to tell the reader you loved someone if you show them that you've woken them up with a cup of coffee every morning (or something like that). And giving sensory information (even smells, sounds, tactile information, and tastes) can give the reader something more tangible to connect to.
On a more positive note: Your repetition wasn't bad. I'm usually not a fan of this kind of repetition, but I liked the twist in the very last line.
These lines were my favorite:
"We were so far apart,
Our bodies unable to touch;
I cried for you and your voice;"
These lines represent the beginnings of imagery. Here, I can picture two distant lovers reaching out for each other. And the line "I cried for you and your voice" is just cryptic and intriguing enough to be considered truly poetic.
Keep in mind that these are just my opinions. Creative license means you are free to take it or leave it. Everything I've written is intended to be helpful, and not malicious in any way. I hope I helped, and keep writing!
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