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Who's your favourite character so far?

Miyu- "Yes! Make them Suffer!" 0.070796460176991 7.1% [ 16 ]
Kagami- "Are you aware that you’re a complete and utter psychopath?" 0.13716814159292 13.7% [ 31 ]
Isaac- "STRIP SCRABBLE!" 0.21238938053097 21.2% [ 48 ]
Aen- "There was Lint on your coat! I was picking it off for you!" 0.079646017699115 8.0% [ 18 ]
Sasuke- "We could fight them!" 0.13274336283186 13.3% [ 30 ]
I don't really like any of them... 0.36725663716814 36.7% [ 83 ]
Total Votes:[ 226 ]

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I love softball and am a pretty good hitter....and base stealer. However, I did manage to take a softball to the funnybone. *It's fastpitch, mind you.* I had to wrap a gel pad thing to my elbow for almost a month to make sure it didn't get hit again, or I'd have nerve damage. xd
I'm ok at tennis, and pretty good at horseback riding.
*Sigh*

Seems I'm having another one of those melencholy days... Heh. It's almost funny how bad I'm feeling. And that memory doesn't help... stare Seems I always see her when I'm feeling bad. I'm not even sure if it is the real memory anymore. She's just always crying and it's all my fault... emo

Heh... I do have a dark side it seems. sweatdrop

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*Sigh*

Seems I'm having another one of those melencholy days... Heh. It's almost funny how bad I'm feeling. And that memory doesn't help... stare Seems I always see her when I'm feeling bad. I'm not even sure if it is the real memory anymore. She's just always crying and it's all my fault... emo

Heh... I do have a dark side it seems. sweatdrop


*leather couch and neat office appears*

Go ahead. Tell Dr. Steve your problems!

Seriously, why you feelin' so down? And who is the person you speak of?

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That's not good, Scarecrow. Just let it off your chest, okay? (It doesn't have to be public on here; just find someone you can trust.)
*agrees with Zeph*
Sorry guys, life's been busy... And I joined a new collab... XD
My first one!!! ^_^

*pumped*
I haven't had much of a chance to get on Gaia, I'm sorry.

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A new collab? For what, exactly? *raises eyebrow*
*is curious too*
;0 Ohh~~. What is it, Aen?
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*Sigh*

Seems I'm having another one of those melencholy days... Heh. It's almost funny how bad I'm feeling. And that memory doesn't help... stare Seems I always see her when I'm feeling bad. I'm not even sure if it is the real memory anymore. She's just always crying and it's all my fault... emo

Heh... I do have a dark side it seems. sweatdrop


*leather couch and neat office appears*

Go ahead. Tell Dr. Steve your problems!

Seriously, why you feelin' so down? And who is the person you speak of?
Don't know... Seems my life has been made up of one let down followed by another.

As for this girl... I don't remember. Someone I was friends with a long time ago. Long long time ago. Least ten years. I don't remember much else. Not a face or a name. But I had almost forgotten until someone came and unburied that skeleton of mine.

Seems I have a lot of skeletons. Things I don't let on about. There's been so many times... Well, lets just say I've been living with bad karma since the day I was born. sweatdrop And hopefully that sums up my current woes.

As for your comment Zephyr... That's the current problem. I don't have anyone I trust. I'm to used to people stabbing me in the back the moment it could get them another step up the social ladder. Guess that's what turned me into my usually bitter self.

But changing the subject, I'm working on a little side project. (Pretty much means that it's going to be half assed and abandoned half way through.) But it's the story of a... Kid (About 17.) Who loses his memory upon attempting suicide. After which he's taken in by a small froup of roommates sharing a house nearby. Not sure what category it'd be but I liked the background and ideas for character development.

I could go into further details tomorrow if you are interested. Otherwise, I'm goung to try to go to bed again.

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hmm... the noobs that cometh... didn't I see that in another comic... *tries to remember*
Woot! I'm out of that emo day now. 3nodding Sorry about that, occasionally I get a fit of depression like yesterday. Luckily it usually lasts less than a couple of days.

But yeah. I have two things that I'm currently working on here and there. "108th" a kind of war comedy... And what I'm currently calling "Ripples." I already mentioned some of the minor details for this one, but I might write up a more detailed description in a little bit.
Here we go, the pologue/opening of Ripples. (The name has a double meaning. 3nodding )

Prologue

Bubbles drift up towards the sunlight as blues race across the surface somewhere above. The sunlight cutting through the water begins to fade as he thinks one last thing. "And so it ends..." But as the last bits of light draw away something breaks the surface diving down towards him. And then it all fades to black.

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Here we go, the pologue/opening of Ripples. (The name has a double meaning. 3nodding )

Prologue

Bubbles drift up towards the sunlight as blues race across the surface somewhere above. The sunlight cutting through the water begins to fade as he thinks one last thing. "And so it ends..." But as the last bits of light draw away something breaks the surface diving down towards him. And then it all fades to black.


excellent idea...very well thought out....

but, as for critique, I would suggest even more sensory details. Get into it. You can literally have 3 sentences about how blue the water is, and how the bubbles drift around him tickling his skin, if you wanted to. If this is a prologue, and not a summary prologue, then you need to be very descriptive with it.

As for a skeleton, a rough draft, a sloppy copy, whatever you prefer to call it, that's very, very good in my opinion.

But you need to flesh out the skeleton.
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excellent idea...very well thought out....

but, as for critique, I would suggest even more sensory details. Get into it. You can literally have 3 sentences about how blue the water is, and how the bubbles drift around him tickling his skin, if you wanted to. If this is a prologue, and not a summary prologue, then you need to be very descriptive with it.

As for a skeleton, a rough draft, a sloppy copy, whatever you prefer to call it, that's very, very good in my opinion.

But you need to flesh out the skeleton.
Thanks... I intend to use it for a comic of some sort eventually. I also have a few more paragraphs that introduce some of the main characters. The main characters are "Rafe" an amnesiac. Rafe isn't his real name, it's something Nathan gave him. As for Nathan. He's a the weird one of the group. Born from a upper middle class family he has a thing for mechanics and japanese animation. His defining feature is his dyed pink hair.

Next is Eileen more known as Ai. Tall, tan, and sporting long silvery hair. She is usually a relax person. And lastly is the antisocial one, Erika. She's easily annoyed and prone to occasional bouts of violence. (Especially towards Nathan.) And that rounds out the foursome that live under one roof.

Here's a little bit more: Ch.1 summary

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Sounds interesting, Scarecrow. 3nodding

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