<center>Can I get some of your feedback on my poems I have written for my poetry anthology i have to hand in to my english teacher in two weeks. sweatdrop (i have eng. every odd day and math every even day.)
Just post a grade you would give me. whee please.
A rhyming scheme poem: Being a Teen
A - Being a teenager is pretty hard
A - When you don't have a library card
B - For me it's how I get away
B - From the troubled problems of today
A - You can party when your older
A - but when your a teen the police are colder
B - when we speak with innocent lies
B - the teachers stare with truth seeking eyes
A - Not knowing what to do in a serious situation
A - or messing up in a presentation
B - Life is great when you are a tween
B - but it becomes confusing when you turn teen
A - Wether it be school or boys
A - we all throw away our childhood toys
B - It would be nice to be twenty
B - but then we'd think the years are too many
What If? poems:
- If I had no brothers
I'd be an only child
I would be spoiled rotton
I would be so wild
-If I had no brothers
I'd have the biggest room
I'd store it with lots of clothes
I'd have a balcony dedicated to the moon
-If I had no brothers
I'd feel all alone
I'd wish I had some siblings to talk to
Just like my own
-I wish
I wish that all was fair
and everything was right
I wish I could find out
why different country's fight
I wish that we knew
where we go when we die
I wish we knew for sure it was a better place
then we would smile instead of cry
I wish we could rewind time
and right our wrongs
then I could make you mind
and sing you our song
opinion poem:
Some believe you are a creep
others say you are a freak
misunderstood
I hate that stuff!
Cheerfull laughs replay in my mind
in my heart they are so kind
friends
I love that stuff!</center>
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