BiggieSmall123
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- Posted: Sun, 01 Feb 2009 01:16:14 +0000
My Submitted writings in the Arena.
One of them had been edited by Alexis Aiko, an amazing writer in my opinion ;D
There's another submitted one in the arena; Please Comment with any advice/tips/ && your opinion.
Maybe....perhaps...this is an advertisment. sweatdrop
http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=101094453#title
One of them had been edited by Alexis Aiko, an amazing writer in my opinion ;D
Alexis Aiko
Her tank top clung against her body as she slowly pulled her shirt over her head. Her chest rose heavily with every breath, as her shirt dropped to the tile floor silently beside her feet.
The boy stopped walking and stared curiously at the girl standing at the edge of the pool, quickly looking away towards his hands that shook with contained excitment.
The mightnight moon shone against the unwavering water as he gulped nervously and hesitatingly looked away, as the girl proceeded stripping off her clothes.
Long, brown curls tumbled over her shoulder as she loosened it off. Almost agonisingly to the guilt ridden boy, she hooked her hands into her waist band. His eyes widen, combined with fear and excitment.
Her innocent gesture only emphasized her taut waist and her long legs. As she slowly bent over, her hair fell in front of her like a curtain. Her shorts were trailing slowly down her thighs, stroking her legs down to her ankles.
Suddenly, she lifted her arms above her head and she dove. Her posture was perfect in the way her body arched, and the water swallowed her in like she belonged. The girl moved with perfect rhythm; and the boy could see her blissful as she came up for air.
....to be continued....
The boy stopped walking and stared curiously at the girl standing at the edge of the pool, quickly looking away towards his hands that shook with contained excitment.
The mightnight moon shone against the unwavering water as he gulped nervously and hesitatingly looked away, as the girl proceeded stripping off her clothes.
Long, brown curls tumbled over her shoulder as she loosened it off. Almost agonisingly to the guilt ridden boy, she hooked her hands into her waist band. His eyes widen, combined with fear and excitment.
Her innocent gesture only emphasized her taut waist and her long legs. As she slowly bent over, her hair fell in front of her like a curtain. Her shorts were trailing slowly down her thighs, stroking her legs down to her ankles.
Suddenly, she lifted her arms above her head and she dove. Her posture was perfect in the way her body arched, and the water swallowed her in like she belonged. The girl moved with perfect rhythm; and the boy could see her blissful as she came up for air.
....to be continued....
There's another submitted one in the arena; Please Comment with any advice/tips/ && your opinion.
Maybe....perhaps...this is an advertisment. sweatdrop
http://www.gaiaonline.com/arena/writing/fiction/vote/?entry_id=101094453#title
