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Shadow Clara
Sounds like a stereotypical teen movie to me. Those don't have to make an ounce of sense or contain any rational human emotion to draw in the crowds. It sounds sort of like that movie "Saving Silverman". Sort of.
Saving Silverman had its good points, I must say. That or I just enjoy watching Steve Zahn get hurt and nuns do ridiculous things. Anyways, to the actual point:
Who are the guys that kidnap her?
How do they know about the money?
How old are they?
What is their connection to her?
How do they do it?
What do Roxanne's parents do?
Why isn't the police involved?
How does Aaron feel about Roxanne/Derek?
Where do 16 year olds get the gas money?
Since when do 16 year olds try to rescue people?
I'll probably think of more. But the ages of the characters irk me.
Snake and Muscles (don't laugh- it's really their nicknames, and it doesn't go much into their life before now.)
I was thinking about making them jealous relatives for a while, but that seemed kind of stupid. Any ideas? The best I can come up with is them being old college enemies or something -.- Ooh!! Idea!! They were college buddies (actually... Snake would be his college buddy, since Muscles is an idiot) with Roxanne's great-uncle, and got mad that he didn't include him in his will. Better?
Who? The bad guys, or the group of friends?
Again, who?
-.- Seriously... be more specific.
Freak out (as expected) and call the police immediately. Her dad gets reaaaaallllllllyyy mad XD But they take her to and from school, and are pretty much only letting her go out once, to a school dance.
They are now!! XD
Reeeeaaaaaalllllyyyy jealous.
Odd jobs? He actually is only going to use his car a few times. Not really needed...
They're her best friends!! And they both love her.
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That good?