QueenOfDarkness411509
You could of told me
But, went without saying a word
Making me upset, you didn't tell me
I would of understood
So, I guess, I'll talk to you when you have the chance.
I'll be here, when you need me.
But, it's so frustrating
as tears form under eyelashes pregnant with guilt
i remember the voice, that said you would let me in, but didn't.
You left with locked lips like the key was missing
What do I do?
What do I say?
the silence is deafening
Sometimes, I don't understand.
emo
not saying your original post was bad just saying, get a little creative. play with words. also sorry if what i added took away from your original post just putting in some examples. also i know it's hard when writing to take out these words "you,me,i" i know those are the most common words but try to tell the poem from your perspective without using them it's quiet the challenge specially if it's in like story mode. sometimes those words can actually be taken out i've taken some off so it maybe get less repetitive sometimes less is more like the 3rd line "making me upset, you didn't tell me" the first 2 lines actually explain that so it might be better to just put "making me upset". anyways have fun writing nice poem by the way.
