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DreamfulNightmare
okay, so, since the 41st one was apparently crap to a couple people here on Gaia... I made my 42nd one today.
sweatdrop and here it is! Oh, also, When I say "patient" I mean by "Mental Patient"
emotion_facepalm I'm kind of getting sick of people going "Oh, by patient you mean, I've gotta be freaking patient to read your crappy poem, Psh, B*T** Please!" And then there are few others that are like "OMG, Mental Asylum Stuff
twisted " Just saying btw... So, Now to the 42nd Patient Poem to the Patient Poem Series!
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Before I get to the poem, I have to ask: Why are you being so aggressive towards me and Restraining Order Blues? I went back and read her comments, and they didn't consist of anything remotely similar to "I've gotta be freaking patient to read your crappy poem..." The words "crappy poem" were never uttered. Please, stop twisting our words.
Frankly, I'm hesitant to even comment {much less give full-blown constructive criticism} to this poem simply based on your reaction to a simple suggestion of reading other famous poems and general advice about any poetry. I said nothing negative about the specific poem. When someone comments or critiques a poem, they're commenting on the poem -- not the author.
Do you want to improve, or are these poems more of a creative outlet? If the latter is the case, then make that known upfront. Tell readers you're just sharing and not to bother with critiques. It's fine; people do it all the time. If you do want to improve, though, then you need to separate yourself from your poetry and not get defensive whenever someone makes a suggestion or asks a question. You can't assume that people know what you mean when you say "patient poem."
{Frankly, your little introduction here reads like a, "Gosh! What idiots to not realize that Patient means Mental Asylum Patient! Aren't those two people jerks?" It's hurtful that you assume Restraining Order Blues and I are these mean people who thought your first poem was "crap." By the way, I'd like to point out that that word was never mentioned in the other thread.}
emotion_facepalm dude... chill, I quote what other people say, not everyone, not just you, people as in, those I've dealt with in the past...
sweatdrop You say I need to be less hostile when I'm not being hostile, though my words might seem like it by accident to you, and I do apologize for that but, I'm not being hostile. Also, here... http://www.gaiaonline.com/forum/original-poetry-lyrics/a-much-needed-introduction/t.92834997/ This might help.
sweatdrop took me like 5-10 minutes to get them all together like this for ya but, I did it.
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stare I honestly feel like I deserve something for doing that... I'd say 5 coins per poem but, you'd probably think I'm trying to give you a shake down...
rofl and then I'd laugh and say "Dude, it's only like 30 coins." and then you'd be like "oh... okay, I see no harm in 30 coins. lol" That's how it would've been probably handled if you'd been 'cool' about things but, you seem way too uptight... Which is kind of weird since you were and have been kind of accusing me of being the uptight one.
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