Angel why?

[Lady Lotus Honey]

Before reading I like to give thanks to this song that inspired me to write this poem

Spirited Away - Ano Natsu He Music Box Version

Before you read I like everyone to please listen to it, closes your eyes and follow the melody, feel the calmness the beautiful tones ~ Just fly in to the song



Enjoy~ Alice Springs emotion_bigheart

[Lady Lotus Honey]

(1) Silent angel in the shy,

...Why so sad?

(2)Angel with feathered wings,

...Why do you sing?

(3) Soft Angel with silver eyes,

...Why do you dance?

(4)Angel with a voice like sunshine,

...Why are you crying?

(5) Pretty Angel with lips painted pink,

...Why are you silent...

(6) Angel, oh Angel,

...Why?

(7)Sometimes you don't need a reason for the things you do
Sometimes you do them because it feel right

[hipster_bunny_love]

i like it :3

[Jay Angel Of Darkness]

that was beautiful

InsaneHappyLuckyAlice

Before reading I like to give thanks to this song that inspired me to write this poem

Spirited Away - Ano Natsu He Music Box Version

Before you read I like everyone to please listen to it, closes your eyes and follow the melody, feel the calmness the beautiful tones ~ Just fly in to the song



Enjoy~ Alice Springs emotion_bigheart

[Lady Lotus Honey]

Arigatō☆! { Thank You! }

XxMockingJayCRXx

hipster_ bunny_love

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[Hajimechii]

Ah nostalgia at it's finest!
One of my favorite movies <3
The poem is very pretty uwu

[Rahkshi Remnant]

Not bad. Not bad all.

[nagisa cheiri]

:') Beautiful heart

[Spenelli]

InsaneHappyLuckyAlice

Aw, I loved Spirited Away.

Really nice poem. :3

[gothic amai]

love spirited away and your poem heart

[Aqua Melody]

Is the first line supposed to be "Silent angel in the sky"?

I'm not really a fan of the formatting (if you have to number it, it's over the top), but it does dress up the poem a bit. On that note, you kept the content really simple. And it makes it seem the wrong kind of simple when you have multiple ellipsis, especially when coupled with visually large pauses. The ellipsis are redundant.There is nothing wrong with simple by the way, it's great. Drawing out each line endlessly though takes away from the written word.

You seemed to be going somewhere with this poem, and you even made a great image of a certain, beautiful, troubled angel, but it doesn't go anywhere. To build on simple thoughts until a complex one is made; that seemed to be the angle of your poem. Unfortunately, the last line isn't drawn from the poem and clashes with the image you've built so far.

I'd like to see this with more direction, but otherwise, good job.