A Poem by me.

You want a sammich?

Yes	34.8%	[ 8 ]
No	21.7%	[ 5 ]
I miss my cupcake. T_T	43.5%	[ 10 ]
Total Votes:			[ 23 ]

[[Black Spikes]]

Shining Eye

The pain,
it's causing a strain.

This eye
why?

It could of
been somebody else.

But nobody should
feel what I've felt.

Upon this wasteland
of a world,

We seek a brand new one
in my burl.

This malice
I feel.

Is enough
to fill a palace.

So I will go on
with this eye.

Because I choose
the sky.

It is was my shining eye
lusts for.

And I will give it more.


So what do you guys think of it?

[Jandar]

Woa

Writers forum pls

[Wandering Bliss]

. . . Roses are red, violets are blue, your topic sucks, and so do you. mrgreen

[edit] I just now pulled that out of my a**. xd

[Soapy Ohz]

lolz THIS EYE! WRYYYYYYYYY!?!?!?!?!?

i liked the poem very much it made me cry

[genome-a-peeking]

Thats great.

[I AM A CAPYBARA]

The writer's forum wouldn't even accept this.
So just give up.

[Steven6777]

No poems here.
Writing forum.

[`sakura [ box ]]

[.

Wrong forum.
The first two stanzas made me laugh.

.]

[Jazztast!c]

It's got a few grammar issues.

And I suggest you find a new rhyming scheme/stanza format.

[iRazor]

It's not that good.

[xxThePerformance]

Cute.

[N0n Sequ1tur]

"YOU'RE FIRED!" >=O
thank you donald.
my a** writes better poetry than you.
please don't ever come back here again.

[bluevalechick]

very cool.

[heartbrokenangel21]

good poem, wrong forum.

[Mi!ako Ai Yazawa]

My friend I do suggest
you may find it does best
if you post right
without a fight
at write's forum, the rest.


On the other hand, what's with the eye?

Aye~~~~ ....