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SpikeDawg9
A west coast rapper, with no sense of white or black,
The only thing i care about is wack or not wack,
and i'm wack, don't make me pick you up, spin ya around,
I'll slit ya throat, if ya make another sound!
An wack soldier, get out my way,
or else find yourself cornered by grenades,
great, now ya swimmin in yo own guts,
"We're drowning!Help!Lifegaurd save us!"
The like gaurd aint here,
he's checkin out britney spears,
besides, learn to swim,
cause i aint comin in!
"Spike, please, my life is on the line!"
The only time that would matter is if it was mine!

Feed please! mrgreen

Dapper Dabbler

It's been a while... 3nodding

Just as an update, I'm puttin things back together with duct tape
plus my weight fluxuates, keepin things steady if luck takes
no breaks. My bad, meant fortune manifests if I affiliate
myself with myself thing everything I touch's great

in a sense. Not the mitas touch but a mutual agreement
to leave laws as fluid as liquids yet bonds as solid as cement
eliminating my demons' intentions as we've been
able to discuss our disagreements. It seems that he meant

to only bring equalibrium to my unbalanced person
Not to cause the lives of other friends to worsen
like making enemies? That's too many wounds to be nursing
so I apolagize to those who I've harmed. To who its concerning

I'm gettin further from the edge and closer to the core
that creates the considerate character that I project and more
with not as many inhibitions. Yes, I'll no longer store
that anger away another day. Expect more than before.
-
Now here's a little rhyme that was due in time.
Nonsense from the mind sparked from only one line.
Use somethin to think with, clear and distinguished,
your ability to produce thought linked with mine.

Bring that beat back! Beat that back! Bring it!
If you do not understand it then don't bother to sing it
or repeate it. You've been defeated if you can't even process
a portion of the meaning then don't act delinquent

and fake like you do. Too many choose to misconstrue
what is brought before their senses and remaining relatively new.
Whatever you do, don't include yourself in the exhibit
at the misguided Zoo. For the few that choose to move to

a solution, ask somebody and you just might recieve
what you asked for. You wouldn't believe
what possibilities could occur if you take the chance to see
farther than your own eyes will allow you to percieve.

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.J.a.z.z.
It's been a while... 3nodding

Just as an update, I'm puttin things back together with duct tape
plus my weight fluxuates, keepin things steady if luck takes
no breaks. My bad, meant fortune manifests if I affiliate
myself with myself thing everything I touch's great

in a sense. Not the mitas touch but a mutual agreement
to leave laws as fluid as liquids yet bonds as solid as cement
eliminating my demons' intentions as we've been
able to discuss our disagreements. It seems that he meant

to only bring equalibrium to my unbalanced person
Not to cause the lives of other friends to worsen
like making enemies? That's too many wounds to be nursing
so I apolagize to those who I've harmed. To who its concerning

I'm gettin further from the edge and closer to the core
that creates the considerate character that I project and more
with not as many inhibitions. Yes, I'll no longer store
that anger away another day. Expect more than before.
-
Now here's a little rhyme that was due in time.
Nonsense from the mind sparked from only one line.
Use somethin to think with, clear and distinguished,
your ability to produce thought linked with mine.

Bring that beat back! Beat that back! Bring it!
If you do not understand it then don't bother to sing it
or repeate it. You've been defeated if you can't even process
a portion of the meaning then don't act delinquent

and fake like you do. Too many choose to misconstrue
what is brought before their senses and remaining relatively new.
Whatever you do, don't include yourself in the exhibit
at the misguided Zoo. For the few that choose to move to

a solution, ask somebody and you just might recieve
what you asked for. You wouldn't believe
what possibilities could occur if you take the chance to see
farther than your own eyes will allow you to percieve.

man, you really could make a single with that, and i would buy it, along with many others!

Dapper Dabbler

Thanks. Your flow is like it usually is. It shows signs of life, but it seems you're kind of holdin yourself back still. for example...

"The only thing i care about is wack or not wack,
and i'm wack"

You're only like that if you think like that so please for a sec stop sayin you're wack. Just use a train of thought, no beat but a tempo. When it works out for you then it'll seem quite simple. 3nodding

edit: Now I gotta jet because I have requirements that need to be met simply because I have a postcount set for when my birthday arrives everything should be fine. On that birthday I'm tyrin to reach post count 9999, not before.

Peace.

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.J.a.z.z.
Thanks. Your flow is like it usually is. It shows signs of life, but it seems you're kind of holdin yourself back still. for example...

"The only thing i care about is wack or not wack,
and i'm wack"

You're only like that if you think like that so please for a sec stop sayin you're wack. Just use a train of thought, no beat but a tempo. When it works out for you then it'll seem quite simple. 3nodding

edit: Now I gotta jet because I have requirements that need to be met simply because I have a postcount set for when my birthday arrives everything should be fine. On that birthday I'm tyrin to reach post count 9999, not before.

Peace.

Alright, thanks.I like something constructive like that, so thanks.
NE 1 wanna battle? Hit me
Dragon Stylez
Hardcore s**t is where I hawk and spit/
constrict on Constance14 neck and tosses it/
was gonna carry you around in Eminem's Mosh pit/
but your not worth the pride of South Boston/
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later just a random freestyle


You wanna battle, friendly competition to build my skills... ahight that's cool wit ya. Seems you callin' me out

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Alright this worlds goin insane,
so crazy, i can't feel my brain,
war, fight, kill!
watch blood spill,
destroying inocent lives by those who say they're "ill"
What i say is obviously joking music,
the game aint a joke,
but you can have fun with it!
I spit my rhymes,
all the time,
You have no clue what's in my mind,
so take your time to think,
That the next one could be me!

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SpikeDawg9
Alright this worlds goin insane,
so crazy, i can't feel my brain,
war, fight, kill!
watch blood spill,
destroying inocent lives by those who say they're "ill"
What i say is obviously joking music,
the game aint a joke,
but you can have fun with it!
I spit my rhymes,
all the time,
You have no clue what's in my mind,
so take your time to think,
That the next one could be me!

oh yeah, rate it please!
SpikeDawg9
SpikeDawg9
Alright this worlds goin insane,
so crazy, i can't feel my brain,
war, fight, kill!
watch blood spill,
destroying inocent lives by those who say they're "ill"
What i say is obviously joking music,
the game aint a joke,
but you can have fun with it!
I spit my rhymes,
all the time,
You have no clue what's in my mind,
so take your time to think,
That the next one could be me!

oh yeah, rate it please!


whee It's good, really good. man i really don't know how to critisize or praise someone's work.

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SpikeDawg9
SpikeDawg9
Alright this worlds goin insane,
so crazy, i can't feel my brain,
war, fight, kill!
watch blood spill,
destroying inocent lives by those who say they're "ill"
What i say is obviously joking music,
the game aint a joke,
but you can have fun with it!
I spit my rhymes,
all the time,
You have no clue what's in my mind,
so take your time to think,
That the next one could be me!

oh yeah, rate it please!


whee It's good, really good. man i really don't know how to critisize or praise someone's work.

Thanks!As for if you need to criticize, just say it could use a bit more work, and keep at it.Stuff like that.But don't say"It stinks!"
******** juanna man ******** double take/
worst movies alive they take the cake//
embarasments like vivica a fox/
to be able to watch her movies im gonna need a whiskey on the rocks//
hollywood treats us like a fool who cant stay in school//
kindom come, that s**t was just cruel///
its only been worst since burn holly wood burn/
there exploiting us but they'll never learn//
Boyz in the hood was a breath of fresh air/
Showing life in the hood is greatly unfair//
Malcom X, do the right thing/
not some movie about wearing bling//
since 92 its been downstream/
Actin like a clown has been the theme//
Its all gone to hell, wheres denzel/
sad how the public uniter is now dave chappelle//
how come people actually see these movies/
undercover brother was anything but groovy//
******** hollywood they could and should/
make an uplifting movie for the common good//
o yah rate please. did it sound too much like a rant that happend to rhyme?
Alright I'm gonna go ahead and change my style a bit so don't be suprised if this this looks like crap.
Beat: Dead Presidents

Check it out,
Life in the word it what it SEEMS, Very time I go to bed I see the same DREAMS/
I see myself in a country during a war and hearing everyone's SCREAMS/
It ain't somethin I usually like to dream about but it might be one of God's SHCEME'S/
But I still gotta SAY/,
Even as as it might look bad now HE's been telling me somthing every night and DAY/
HE's been telling me to do somthing, help the world and keep it from a DISSARAY/
So I just gotta make it, out in the open but not as missionary but as NOTORIOUS J/
I'd rather be my own man doing what I want to do, but things come first even when thigs look GREY/
Even as I write rhymes like THIS, I still gotta help everyone have some sort of BLISS/
Even as I REMINISCE, I take a look at my life and see if it was worth taking a DISS/
I'll spill my own blood for my family but would I do it for someone I know as good as the ABYSS?/
Heh I hope I'l ever have to KNOW, but is giving up my life somthing I should THROW?/
I remember one of the dreams I was on a PLEATU, seein heaven above and hell BELOW/
This only happened 3 AGO, but it'll always be with me like a Chef has DOUGH/
I won't have all the answer to the world , but I all I KNOW for sure is that I finshed this:
NTELLECTUAL, CRITICAL, THOUGHTFUL, DREAMFUL, CONTROVERSIAL, FLOW/


I wasn't sure about this style so I want feedback on what you tought.
EDIT biggrin S how do you rap like this? Its too much of a pain to capitlize the letters gonk
******** the police pullin a ***** over when he dint do s**t/
it makes life a b***h/
make a ***** pull a gun out of his hip/
and shoot a clip/
into a cop and dip/
but for that s**t/
(heres were I go fast)
you' ll get sentenced to a quartar centery/
in maximum security/
then life gets so blurry/
and you'll neva escape the fury/
that fate gave ya, and the lure/
into the torchor/
you'll neva move forard/
(normal speed)
just tword/
hell, like a spell/
bieing in hood
it anit good/
bining a gangsta ain't that cool/
stick to school/
neva to drugs or violace/
Just like I did/
get out that s**t/



please rate it, Thanks.
uhhh Hello! anyone.....

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