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Are you looking for CC? If so, you have a lot of weird typos -- like "I"'s that aren't lowercase -- and strange grammar, like on multiple pages, words are split without hyphens and without regard to syllables, so twice, I misread what someone said, because half the split word was a real word, but the next line was gibberish, so I had to reread it as one word to understand what was meant. I don't like that. Wide word bubbles would help you a lot here, because then, you wouldn't have to split words as much.

The font you're using is okay, but I think you could do better. An all capital one from Blambot would be nice.

As far as the plot and characters go, I actually do like them. A bunch of lines're cheesy as heck, but I like cheese sometimes. I read this whole thing, I want to read more, and I like the main characters, so that's all good.
Didn't you get laughed out of here like a year ago for having a really bad comic and being completely unable to accept critiques? Or am I thinking of another derivative Mary Sue-esque anime comic thing with terrible anatomy and horrible cliches called "Angel Protected"?

edit: oh it is you. Nice to see that you haven't listened to a word we said and are still producing art on the same level as you were over a year ago.
http://www.gaiaonline.com/forum/comic-creators/oc-angel-protected/t.76775717/
http://www.gaiaonline.com/forum/recycle-bin/webcomic-angel-protected/t.77529759_1/
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Are you looking for CC? If so, you have a lot of weird typos -- like "I"'s that aren't lowercase -- and strange grammar, like on multiple pages, words are split without hyphens and without regard to syllables, so twice, I misread what someone said, because half the split word was a real word, but the next line was gibberish, so I had to reread it as one word to understand what was meant. I don't like that. Wide word bubbles would help you a lot here, because then, you wouldn't have to split words as much.

The font you're using is okay, but I think you could do better. An all capital one from Blambot would be nice.

As far as the plot and characters go, I actually do like them. A bunch of lines're cheesy as heck, but I like cheese sometimes. I read this whole thing, I want to read more, and I like the main characters, so that's all good.
Thank you for reading my work ^_^. yeah I sometimes go right through my work and then post, I usually go back and read over everything but after the fact... its stupid I know but I have some one going over my work already its just not posted yet TnT, I volunteer a lot of my time so I havent had time to go back and repost the updated corrected stuff, thank you so much for the offer ^_^. yeah I know the fonts not my favorete and i'm sure you saw I changed it a lot through the chapters, I found the font I want to use and yes its an all caps font. I just havent added it yet because I didn't want to chang font during the chapter but chapter 5 will have the new font. I'm trying to inprove as I go along, my art work is different now too and I have thought about going back and changing it but that would only set me back on my story at the moment and I want to keep going.
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It's interesting. I don't like the style of art, but then again I can't draw to save my life.

Story seems to move a little too fast.

All in all it seems like a really good concept. I cant wait to read more!
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It's interesting. I don't like the style of art, but then again I can't draw to save my life.

Story seems to move a little too fast.

All in all it seems like a really good concept. I cant wait to read more!


thank you for reading and there will be more posted this friday.
I'm a fast pace person, but i'm trying! to slow it down a bit more. sweatdrop
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It's interesting. I don't like the style of art, but then again I can't draw to save my life.

Story seems to move a little too fast.

All in all it seems like a really good concept. I cant wait to read more!


thank you for reading and there will be more posted this friday.
I'm a fast pace person, but i'm trying! to slow it down a bit more. sweatdrop

welcome!

As a writer I know how hard it is to slow down.
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Redfox44
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It's interesting. I don't like the style of art, but then again I can't draw to save my life.

Story seems to move a little too fast.

All in all it seems like a really good concept. I cant wait to read more!


thank you for reading and there will be more posted this friday.
I'm a fast pace person, but i'm trying! to slow it down a bit more. sweatdrop

welcome!

As a writer I know how hard it is to slow down.


I get really excited when I comes to telling my story and I have put it off for so long that just want to post post post, but now that I have a schedule I have to keep I can start to mellow out and work more on the story they way I want it to come out... I hope people can see that in the next chapter

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