ok never go 2 this page:
http://www.freewebs.com/jaszyflower/
its sucks.
ok i ead the 1st "chapter" and barely any of the 2nd
flaws with 1st chapter:
Sesshoumaru NEVER EVER would miss inuyasha.....
ta him hes not worth it!!
also Sesshoumaru attempted ta kill his father....
and well i skipped a bunch cuz i thought wasnt worth squat
flaws with 2nd chapter:
slugs really?
y would slugs reveil that they r with Naraku?
Inuyasha wouldnt b like that ta Kagome!!!sheesh
Miroku and Sango WOULDNT laugh at Kagomes pain!!! wow....
Inuyasha woulnt HIT Kagome on the head
she woulndt "forget" the word ta make the necklace work(witch btw is "sit" wink
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now u kno why thought this was stupid -.-"
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