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 Posted: Sat Jun 30, 2007 3:32 am
I'm quick tempered and so self centered
I won't remember others if I won't be remembered
I know that I've gotta go to school in september
and I've come up with 20ways to make myself look better
I'm so self aware, I swear, I'm so proud
Cos I'm the centre of attention when I walk through a crowd
At least in my own mind, that's just how I feel
Snapping back to reality but it doesn't feel real
Cos I'm comming out with rhymes that should be getting me deals
But nobody around me recognises my skill
I'm quick tempered and so self centered
You see I used my skills as an mc
To take your time to tell you
That I like to talk about me.
Can someone rate that for me?
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Posted: Sun Jul 01, 2007 6:15 pm
7.5 Good poem, good rhymes, but at the beginning you were having the aabb rhyme scheme, where at the end you had an abcb rhyme scheme. After that, it's good. Can ya rate mine?
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Posted: Sat Jul 14, 2007 11:55 am
7 - I don't know, it just didn't have that..."oomph" for me. >_> It was still pretty good though. And yeah, the rhyme scheme was a bit messed up towards the end there.
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