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I am writing a short story for school, and I would love for you all to tell me what you think. If anyone thinks it is good, then I might write more, but I doubt it is that good, just enough to get me and A!!Please tell me you true feelings about it. heart heart Ali





“Blood Drops on Roses”



By Ali Jade




Have you ever felt that everything around you was superficial, that you weren’t living

your true life, well I have and now I know that I was living a life that wasn’t mine. All

you truly need in life is someone for you to love and to love you for all of eternity, by

dating Benjamin I would get just that, love for all of eternity. My name is Nicole Wright,

I am sixteen years old, and my boyfriend and I are becoming vampires.

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It all started early Thursday morning on February 4, 2006. It was freezing outside and I

was hurrying to get inside the school before I froze. The moment I stepped in the door I felt a

chill run up my spine, something weird was going to happen that day, I knew it too. My first

instinct was to get back in my car, drive home, and crawl under my covers and sleep off the

feeling. I was just about to turn around and leave, that’s when I saw him. I stopped dead in my

tracts and just stared at him.

All day long I kept seeing him, then it was time for Algebra II, I came in late and there

was only one seat left, the one sitting directly next to Benjamin. My heart stopped, then began to

pound in what seemed like the back of my throat. I quickly sat down next to him and he turned,

flashed a beautiful smile at me and outstretched his hand as Mr. Riverton began a dreadfully long

speech about inequalities and variables. “Hi, I’m Benjamin, and you are?” My heart stopped

again and I mumbled something unintelligible and I heard his soft voice say, “What was that?”

I was just about to answer, or well try to tell him again whenever a loud voice caught my

attention, “Nicole Wright, is there something you and Mr. Jones would like to share with the

class.” My voice had left me completely and then I heard Benjamin speak in a voice that I had

not yet heard, it was authoritative and slightly angry, “I was just introducing myself, sir, she was

about to tell me her name whenever you spoke.” “Oh,” was all that came from Mr. Riverton, no

one had ever stood up to him, especially a new student at that.

After Algebra, I walked with Benjamin to lunch. I decided to sit with him, my excuse

was so that I could tell him about things at the school, but really I just felt the need to be close to

him.

Once we sat down at a secluded table near the back of the cafeteria he looked at me with

beautiful green eyes. I had green eyes as well, but mine were dull and my emotions were so clear

in them that it gave away every one of my feelings. “You have really beautiful eyes,” I heard him

say softly, more to himself than to me but he looked directly at me as he said it. I decided to

smile at him but not say anything just in case he was not talking to me.

“Nicole, this is going to be a little weird but there is something you don’t know about

me…and I need you to know this. Come see me this afternoon, will you?” Benjamin handed me

a small piece of paper with his address on it and I took it, he didn’t even wait for me to answer,

but we both knew that I would have said yes.

It was nine O’clock, and I was pulling into Benjamin’s drive way. I got out of the car

and walked up to his door and rang the doorbell. The door had opened seconds after I had rung

the bell. “Hey!” Ben said with strained enthusiasm. I looked at him with anxious eyes as he

directed me to the living room.


I sat down on the couch next to him and he began to speak quickly and softly, “There is not much

time to explain all of this, and everything that I am about to say is true, so you really have to

believe me.” I nod at him looking more confused than ever. “I am going to come right out and

say this, Nicole, you and I are Vampires.” I look at him with a horrified but intrigued expression.

“You can’t be serious!” “Oh, but I am,” was his response, “ Just let me tell you everything before

you say anything else.” I nod again hanging on his every word.

“So let me get this straight,” I began, “We are vampires. We have been since we were

born?” Benjamin nodded then said, “Half of the vampire trait is passed down into us, then when

we are older we can choose to blood with someone else, meaning exchange blood, to make it

complete, the catch is, the person you blood with is your soul mate.” “We are soul mates…?” I

asked happily. Benjamin nodded and then continued, “Usually if you do not blood with your soul

mate and want to stay human then you can live a normal life, but every 250 years there is one

couple who have a rare blood type, if we do not become vampires by midnight tonight then we

will die. We are already beginning to get sick, the sickness began taking over us this morning at

twelve a.m.” “That was why I was feeling so horrible whenever I got to school this morning,” I

had said finally understanding what was wrong with me. “Yes, and Nicole, I would love to sit

here and chit chat, but we only have about two more hours until we die, and let me tell you, I

don’t fancy dieing.” Nicole nods taking in everything that had been said since nine that evening.

“Okay, how do we do this?” I asked looking at him, a little nervous, but determined. Benjamin

smiled at me with the happiest expression in the world and said, “Give me your hand.” He took

out a knife, cut the palm of his hand holding his breath so he wouldn’t gasp and then held the

knife to me, I did the same but with a more shaky hand and we squeezed as much blood from our

palms as we could into a bowl and mixed it. He took an eyedropper, squeezed some into it, and

began to put drops of our blood onto a beautiful red rose. Once he was done, he placed the rose

on a log in his fireplace and then turned on the fire. The rose burst into flames with the wood and

I began to feel a lot better. “It is complete,” he said with a smile. “Thank you, but now that we

are full fledged vampires there is something you should know, the people you are living with are

not your parents, I am to take you to your real parents.” I nod as if I had been expecting this all

along. “This is the beginning of a new life Nicole,” Benjamin said softly, “I know,” Was the only

thing I could say, but my life was already beginning to look better.





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Sadly, there is not anymore just yet. I am in the process of reading New Moon. I haven't had the time to get around to reading it so I am doing that now because my English teacher wants to borrow it as soon as I am done, so that is my first priority. If i get done with everything that I need to do then I will get on, retype it, and change everything up so that I can make it more detailed and what not. It kind of makes me think of Twilight, so I feel as if I am plagorizing. Please tell me what you think.

It's great... I just think it's a little fast-paced... or something like that..

But I would relly like to read more...

It would be nice to know how Benjamin got to know all the vampire things... biggrin

That was really good!! I wish you'd post the rest.

I thought it was good, a little confusing and fast paced but very good.

cool story

Twas a good consept but i think with more time you could hammer out the details and make the story flow a little better.