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 Posted: Fri Feb 02, 2007 7:11 pm
The leaves will tremble
as the wind kisses them oh-so delicately.
The sea will sing and jump into the air
as the currents twist and coil in a neverending melody.
The fire will leap and hiss and curl
as it climbs and crackles in a vain effort to touch the stars.
And the Sun and Moon take turns watching
the world beneath them grow and thrive and live.
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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 9:17 pm
Nice. I like how you personified the elements and made them do stuff. A correction: it's "never ending." Two words. I think the last line would sound better as, "the world beneath them grow and live and thrive." But you might like it the other way. =P
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Posted: Thu Apr 12, 2007 7:34 am
Most awesome! You did a great job! I love your poem. biggrin
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