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 Posted: Mon Jan 15, 2007 6:49 am
Please Tell me what you think of my poem please ^.^ :
I stabbed
The pain
Hoping
For it to gain
My life
Numb
Things are dumb
Plain, boring
And horrid
My life
Gone
It’s slowly
Fading
Can’t stand
The shame
No friends,
No family
No love
I stabbed
The pain
Hoping
For it to gain
Making my
Death come
True
A knife, sharp
Cutting, appealing
Like a candy
For a child
Feeling it
Go in, pain
Flowing in
The life once
Known
Happiness
Comes, as darkness
Runs into my
eyes, I faded
Away
and die
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Posted: Thu Jan 18, 2007 8:45 am
''I stabbed
The pain
Hoping
For it to gain ''
I dont understand that, in soe places I think you've just used any old word that rhymes... But other than that it's good.
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Posted: Sun Jan 21, 2007 11:28 am
Good job! 3nodding Keep up the good work.
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