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 Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2006 9:31 pm
Do you remember our midnight tryst,
Under the eaves of the old tree?
And the moonlight shining on the boughs,
Of that winter holly-tree.
Shining, shining like a star,
Upon the wasted leaves?
Through all the years it always seems,
As I look back, a far-off dream.
I look to you, your solemn face,
Bathed in moonlight, godly grace.
A world of stories to be told,
Your gentle kiss, soft yet bold.
Do you remember that night under the blood-red holly tree?
Do you remember our midnight tryst,
Under the old tree?
The moonlight beaming,
Snuffles, my tears,
Your strong hands touching my face,
Dark leaves teeming, shadows weaving
Shapes upon the darkened space?
I’d promised you that night,
Sworn forever by pale moonlight,
To see you sometime soon.
"But alas, my dear!" The fates did cry,
their sadness lit by moon.
I heard of your death two days hence,
And longed for your presence ever since.
gonk So much for messing with the rhyme scheme.
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Posted: Sat Dec 30, 2006 10:07 pm
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Posted: Sun Dec 31, 2006 12:36 am
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Posted: Sun Dec 31, 2006 2:04 pm
Simple, yet dripping with beauty.
Oh, and...um...pirates all the way. ARRRRR pirate
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Posted: Tue Jan 02, 2007 10:50 am
stone_angel4 Simple, yet dripping with beauty.
Oh, and...um...pirates all the way. ARRRRR pirate Aw, tankies. Everything I write, poetry-wise, anyways, rhymes. And it drives me NUTS. So I wanted to mess with the rhyme scheme. Bwhaha! Another one! whee pirate
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Posted: Sun Jan 07, 2007 11:07 am
Rhyming is not something I enjoy.
But it happens.. alot.
And I deal with it.
I sometimes rhyme.
Though no one ever sees it.
Anyways. This was short and sweet.
Sensual.. but maybe a little over done.
For such a short piece.
and I liked the ending.
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Posted: Sun Jan 07, 2007 4:53 pm
Tankies for the critique! Feel free to roast me, if you will. I desperately need the experience! The rest isn't done yet, it's got four more verses and a hook, but they're still in the Jurassis-era-of-awkward-wording.
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Posted: Sun Jan 07, 2007 6:04 pm
Sometiems things take time.
So now worries.
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Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 6:47 pm
I finished! whee Feel free to roast me now.
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