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 Posted: Mon Dec 25, 2006 12:10 am
[ The Product Of Brain Damage ] Here be my little collective of drawings and poems.
Depending on how much I end up drawing or writing, I'll have to delete some from here.
But all of it will end up in my journal, because I'm an art whore.
xd
I like people commenting on my work whether or not they liked it.
I adore constructive criticism, so don't be afraid to point something out to me.
'Kay?
'Kay.What's the Scoop, sucka?02-26-06:
I POSTED MORE SHTUFF.
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Posted: Mon Dec 25, 2006 12:11 am
[ Poems ]The Twin Siamese Vision:Witness twin black cats
blending in irony.
"If it were,
then to you, it wouldn't be."
Logic sprays me blind-
skewing in saturation
with swelling sets
of painted eyes
Straining to plead for sight.
"It's a temporary fear.
Just relax your mind
and medicate your eyes."
Aim to candor.
Avert your eyes
at the speed
of a third hand.
A sharp colour
rolling on blurred stairs.
"You can see this;
you can feel this."
Approaching breaths-
weave down my spine.
Coaxing a reaction
by a sight alone.
Carrying a bundle
of bags of bitten nails.
"Keep it clouded,
or they'll slip straight through."-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-+-Glass Snow:Open your eyes,
we're here.
Past the chocolate skies
with their bursting stars;
the ones that dropped beautifully;
lights in the palms of our hands.
Before the sweet snow lied
peppering down to us-
then minting; falling and forming
an awkward striped road.
And after our tongues met
our gums; smiling wildly-
looking up at the lambent sun-
tasting the dizzy drops of crystal.
We see it now;
a graceful descent
that's frosting the sight
of our cinnamon framed haven.
Our very own themed melody;
it's playing just for this.
Open your eyes,
we're here.
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Posted: Mon Dec 25, 2006 12:13 am
[ Drawings ]I gots nothin' yet.
D;
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Posted: Mon Dec 25, 2006 12:15 am
I love critiques.
They fuel meh.
cool
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Posted: Wed Dec 27, 2006 7:02 pm
Your poems scream anger... which can get old pretty fast. Maybe implement variety?
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Posted: Wed Dec 27, 2006 8:09 pm
Funny. Only the second one is angry. Oh well. whee
Thanks!
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Posted: Wed Jan 10, 2007 8:24 pm
I'm not much of a critic, but I can comment!!
I must say, I love your poems. They are wonderful.
So keep writing and I'll read. smile
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Posted: Mon Jan 22, 2007 10:12 am
Double Dutch Melody
I really loved this poem. You leave the meaning to the reader, but you also give the reader small hints about it. It's beautiful in a horrifying way.
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Posted: Mon Feb 05, 2007 4:37 am
Wow. Thanks! whee
Those are pretty much done for critiquing.
I finally snagged someone in the poetry forum and it helped a lot.
Imma be working on some new ones soon.
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Posted: Mon Feb 26, 2007 9:09 pm
New poem up.
Took down two other ones, but left up "Glass Snow" because I happen to like that one.
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