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my first poem posted here. plz rate

is it any good?

yes

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kinda

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Total Votes : 4

closeyetfar1

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Posted: Fri Oct 20, 2006 6:23 pm

you held my HAND
i felt so GREAT
i wanted to make you FEEL that way
but i was SCARED

you gave me a HUGE
i felt so GREAT
i wanted to make you FEEL that way
but i was SCARED

you gave me a KISS
i felt so GREAT
i wanted to make you FEEL that way
but i was SCARED

you said you LOVED me
i felt so GREAT
i wanted to make you FEEL that way
but i was SCARED

i was SCARED
cuz i DIDNT want to make you mad
and have you LEAVE me
but in the END you did

Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 7:51 am

i like it... it kind of confused me htough but it was still good. very "lovey"

xdemonicallyxyours13x

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eMoC00kies

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Posted: Sat Oct 21, 2006 10:18 am

It's good, but you use some of the words to much. Stretch your variety.

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