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| Do you like my unfinished poems so far? |
| Hell no!!!!! |
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| FINISH THE POEMS!!!!!! |
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| *poll whore option* or gimme GOLD |
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 Posted: Mon Mar 13, 2006 2:46 pm
The following are a couple of unfinished poems that I would like your insite on:
Poem#1: I'm wondering in a cave of lust, trying to find my way to you. Traped in this forsaken land, my soul chained to your heart. Thoughts and fantasys of you corrupt my already corrupted mind. Blood from my heart's open sanity inscribes your names into my life.
Poem#2: Walking down the tunnel of darkness, hand in hand with my knight of lust. Seeing those green eyes makes me want you even more. Can't handle this, not doing anything. Flames of passion burst from our souls, filling our minds with only thoughts of each other. Our bodies being embrassed by the love for one another.
If you have any ideas what I could add on to them, please tell me!!!
Thankyou!!!
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Posted: Mon Mar 13, 2006 2:54 pm
They are ok in my oppinion. I think they will be better when you finish, but you do have a nice start.
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Posted: Mon Mar 13, 2006 3:04 pm
NIve start, the only thing you have to be careful of is making sure that they don't become overly dark and turn to cheesy.
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Posted: Wed Apr 12, 2006 9:47 am
Hay you should finish the poems just because
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Posted: Thu May 11, 2006 6:15 pm
i heart your poems and i wish to be in love such as that once again since she ripped t6e heart from me and i havent found someone to put it back in
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Posted: Sun Aug 20, 2006 3:12 pm
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Posted: Thu Aug 24, 2006 7:51 am
You have a good start, and don't worry about it, When the perfect ending come you'll know it
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