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My Bad Day

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GoGreenForMonkeys

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Posted: Sun May 02, 2010 10:12 am

My Bad Day

Today I'm really mad, but sad.
I guess that's 'cause I acted bad.
My bad attitude was first at school.
I was as lazy as a mule.
First I talked to my friend.
Then I did my math in pen.
I tripped Kadare!
He's in mid-air.
Well, so long.
I have no more to say.
I hope you have as worse a day!

Posted: Sun Aug 29, 2010 8:05 pm

I thought your poem was pretty good. I loved the way you ryhmed the first and last two lines and thought it was easy to read, kinda catchy. But a couple lines didn't seem to fit. (I tripped Kadare! He's in mid-air.) Also, I think there should be a comma in between these two lines instead of a period.(First I talked to my friend, Then I did my math in pen.) But other than those things I liked it!

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