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 Posted: Mon Dec 12, 2005 12:55 pm
Just somewhere to stick poems I come up with but have nowhere else to put them!
constructive critism ONLY!! thanks.
((warning:most of this stuff is KINDA depressing. you have been warned. sorry if it destresses you.))
I'll post my first poem when I come up with it.
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Posted: Tue Dec 13, 2005 11:47 am
ok, here we go.
I am always there for you. I will always want you when no one else will. I will always listen to you. I will always love you; But, theres one thing I shall never do, and that is to say 'I love you.'
Not very good, unless you REALLY think about it.
love is, love was and love will always be.
short 'n' sweet.
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Posted: Sat Dec 17, 2005 11:41 am
hey, what about this?
ignorance must be bliss, 'cos you don't know I fancy you.
MWAH-HA-HA-HA!! Yeah, based off of an ongoing life expirience of mine, at the mo.
my car is a suki ans in Japanese suki means love, and boy, do I love my suki!
meh.
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Posted: Sun Dec 18, 2005 6:41 am
what would you do if you had only one day to live? the one question not to ask me.
ho-hum. I was gonna put something instead of me, but I decided not to for my own reasons.
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Posted: Sun Dec 18, 2005 10:08 am
hm.. I went through a phase once: where I could only come up with short sentences instead of long poems...
so what I did, was write them all them, whenever they came... later on, I arranged them all together into a semblance of order. and I called them "conversations with myself 1.1"
hehehe
it kinda work.. but then i developed an obsession with that kind of senseless poetry and very "nice" titles...
so... keep those one liners coming!
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Posted: Sun Dec 18, 2005 10:23 am
mmm... I like them... 'one-liners' as you called them... short and sweet, hehe
btw what makes you think they are depressing? it's just a form of expression at the very least... so don't blame yourself if someone finds them amusing or if another finds them depressing or if somebody thinks it's barely worth the effort...
criticism is, for a lack of better explanation, a mean to say what you want to say because you lack the grounds to express yourself any better than someone else already did, so learn from what ppl 'criticises' because they don't 'like it' until they come up with something better they have no right to put it aside and glare at it!!!
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Posted: Mon Dec 19, 2005 5:56 am
thanks guys!! 4laugh
mr tooshie ((o_O)) I only half understood what you said, but what I do understand, THANKS!! I call it depressing because, to begin with, I was gonna write down this poem, but then decided against it. but hey, you only got one life, so live it!!
I gave you my heart, but you threw it away. you thought you were free of me, didn't you, when I couldn't took my life? Well, you were wrong to think that, because, I'm the presence you feel as you walk home from school. I'm the owner of the laughter you hear whe you fall. I'm the one who kisses you when you're awake and smothers you when you're asleep. For my presence shall always be with you, no matter how hard you try to shake it off, No matter where you go, I'm always there. As long as you hate me, I'll always be with you.
Well, not that amazing, but still, I tried.
Oh, my character said this in the vampire rp I'm doing.
life is blood and blood is life. words of a hunter, the screams of the dead, the breath of two combined minds. may their combined strength aid the one in defeating this evil. In this night, and in this hour, I call upon my ancient power. To cleanse and to heal. to stop the pain, NOW!!
meh. I like one liners, their short and they don't take up too much space. 3nodding
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Posted: Mon Dec 19, 2005 6:04 am
oh yeah, I'm gonna do some brain storming for a story I wanna write, It's been inspired by this pic.  the artist is at http://shirotsuki.deviantart.com/ENJOY!! oh yeah, and, by the way, I didn't draw this pic. also, the song 'final distace' by Utada Hikaru has inspired it aswell. It's a romance story. I dunno what I'm gonna call it.... any ideas? oh yeah, and by the way again, you can listen to final distance at www.radioblog.com sorry if this is spamming, I'm a n00b.
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Posted: Wed Dec 21, 2005 8:46 am
oh yeah, I had to explaine something to a fellow roleplayer about why my charecter had done something, and I wrote:
darkness is allways there, light merly covers it up. it never goes away. darkness is eternal, nothing can defeat it, light is the only defence against it, and after a time, even that won't work.
hope ya like!! 3nodding
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Posted: Fri Dec 23, 2005 7:52 am
my sisters mouth is like a black hole, not even a few crumbs can escape it!
heh-heh
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Posted: Fri Dec 23, 2005 8:09 am
becoming the darkness, shutting out the light. shutting off your sight because to become the darkness, is to let anger cloud your mind.
made up on the spot.
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Posted: Mon Dec 26, 2005 12:19 pm
Love is like a physchotic killer, it shreds your heart to pieces.
heart ache.
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Posted: Tue Dec 27, 2005 7:21 am
A wish, to wish upon a shooting star, to wish wherever you are. near or far. wish on, wish off, wish along, wish a song. Wish all you want, for one fact shall taunt, your wish may never come true, because a wish is merly breath and words at a beautiful moment.
I qute like that one!
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Posted: Fri Dec 30, 2005 5:53 am
Ilike to listen to the rain, it washes away the pain , it's the only thing keeping me saine.
Meh....
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Posted: Fri Dec 30, 2005 8:27 am
WOW.
Honestly?
WOW.
I've never really seen poetry like this before. I laughed, I cried, I did the hula.
Well, maybe not the last two, but I did laugh on quite a few of them. (My Sister's mouth) and I did feel sad on a few of them as well.
These are REALLY good!
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