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 Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2007 11:38 am
When will this life end,
And when will it begin again?
It was great and fun.
But there was nothing to gain.
You were there for me,
And I left you for someone else.
You were there today to,
And I couldn't see anyone else.
"Why did you leave." You asked.
You started to fall apart.
I told you, "I didn't remember."
But you saw right threw my heart.
You fell to the floor crying,
And I couldn't do anything.
I kept trying and trying,
To stop you sadness for once.
But it was to late.
You were over taken with sadness.
I thought to myself.
"I should be thrcast into hells darkness."
I'm sorry for what I did.
But I had no choice.
When you would start to speak.
I could no loger hear your voice.
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Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2007 1:32 pm
you have like 3 different rhyme schemes, try keepin it all the same, or at most use 2 for a short poem like that
other than that...CAN SOMEONE POST A HAPPY POEM D;
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Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2007 1:36 pm
Soviet Mudkipz you have like 3 different rhyme schemes, try keepin it all the same, or at most use 2 for a short poem like that other than that...CAN SOMEONE POST A HAPPY POEM D; ok just because you asked i'll now post a happy poem! yes people, happy poems exist.
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Posted: Mon Nov 19, 2007 10:16 pm
Soviet Mudkipz you have like 3 different rhyme schemes, try keepin it all the same, or at most use 2 for a short poem like that other than that...CAN SOMEONE POST A HAPPY POEM D; It sounded good to me so i didn't care.
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Posted: Thu Nov 29, 2007 5:21 pm
I guess no one likes it. meh
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