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I wrote this during English class as an assignment for topical poetry. I chose Death - it was the only good one on the list. Opinions, criticisim, please? Be nice. Flamers will be turned into marshmellows and roasted. whee


The midnight fog sits chill and damp
Against her ivory skin.
The mausoleum's gates are shut;
Wrought bars of worldly sin.


Soft ebon hair, once so pristine,
Still swathes her graceful head.
And as I stand here cursing fate,
I know my love is dead.


Her soul fled in the winter
When the nightingale won't sing.
They found upon her frozen breast;
Our broken wedding ring.


They say the angels wept for her,
The soul besieged by fright,
They say the moon bore halo'd brow
As she slipped away that night.


Cold raindrops marred the coffin lid,
Embossed with mourning black;
Her marble lids hide azure eyes;
She's never coming back.


They placed her 'pon the altar
With a solemn moonlight hymn,
The silver cross betwix'd her palms
Belies the reaper's whim.


The mourners came, but never stayed.
So runs the fear of men.
I alone stayed standing guard
Until my dearest wakes again.


I'll forever maintain vigilance
Though my heart remains bereft;
My darkest love will never wake,
But her spirit never left.


*~Raeluna~*

it sounds cool

i love it blaugh heart
but the last section wasnt needed
the second to last bit is perfect ending =D

before you publish i would look it over and cange some thing like is it soupsed to be you or another girl cuz at one point your talking about some one and then your talking about you so i think you should change some things aroud but all in all it was great.

i loved it because it tells what the writer of the poem feels and its not a harsh fats pace like some poems its slow, flowing, graceful.