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Gaian Name: Sodji
Character Full Name: Lord Algran King of Undeath
Age: ~!unknown can live forever!~
Gender: Male
Race: Lich
Appearance: you see 2 dull red eyes showing through a black cloak billowing around him the black cloak has a bright white trimming around the edge of it you also see theer is a sloft grey glow around him
Personality: untrusting, good alinged, lonner (usualy), old and knolageable, hystory will be explained in rp's..... if you get to know him and plot has any relivence it it
Weapons: a black orb with dark purple mist inside it (many used will be explaned ingame), 15 packets of death energy, rase dead spell (cost 3 packets) deaths door ( cost 5 packets), wraths shroud ((veary powerful ignors most minor weponds)cost 5 packets every paulse)*pulse is a time when a magical energy fills the land and revives people of there injorys one comes about every 3 hrs. restors packets*, minor (relly minor) healing
Skills: quick thinking, age/wisdom, spells, being undead
Background: a son of a wethy govenor a lich came and raded our town me and my fammily barily excaped with our lives we went and eventualy came across a monistary to anubus we stayed tehre for a wile and my parents eventualy died of age i was left alone anubus granted me an orb of necromancy! and i left to find help training i went south and found a group of necromancers that helped me train in the dark ways eventualy i left when i learned so mutch and spent countless years trying to find the elusive lich herbalds the one who ook my life from me * sorry it i snot long and pritty im sorta rushed for time right now so ya i can answer any questions you post*

No offense or anything-but you really need to check your spelling. As well as capitalization and correct punctuation. :/ sweatdrop

But to be actually of some help, I'd need to know what type of Rp is this for. I ask this because most Liches [of the undead kind] are able to cast spells as the result of their heightened magical abilities. Plus since you kinda gained your powers from another Lich you should more likely be a minor undead Lich-instead of a full fledged Lich. Though I'm not dictating what your bio has to be here- but from what you have [and I know it's short] it sounds like you didn't fully earn the right of passage into "Lich-dom", and instead was transformed by some other Lich. [I hope I'm not being rude]

Don't forget, necromancer's studied for years to obtain the "perfect undeath" known as the Lich. Liches are probably more solitary and isolated then one might think-making a Lich hard to track down-unless he is noticeable by his reputation. Reasons for this are, the reaction people would have to the Lich-the same way you wouldn't see a dead body in broad daylight.

Regarding the "Monastery of Anubis" there would've been no such thing, as the Egyptians did not build monasteries-as gods were said to have lived in "Temples". Though, first of all, the term "temple" is misleading, and secondly, the term covers a huge variety of different structures that evolved over such a vast period of time that many people have a difficulty comprehending just how long a time this period spans. No one lived in the temples-they were the sole living house of the gods. To receive something from the gods was a tremendous ordeal as well-you would've had to impressed the Death god so much, that he decided to grant you with a special object. Most likely you did not receive a special orb-unless you plan on describing what sort of incredible service you did in Anubis' name. Of course I'm assuming you mean Egyptian culture-because no one else worshiped these gods, and there is only ONE Anubis.

Of course I could be wrong and you meant some other god-if you did, please disregard my whole last statement-and elaborate (or spell correctly).

Regarding your personality-I don't think a Lich should resemble a whiny hero with a silent vow. Though he does not have to be hateful-more or less darkened through his experiences. Why? Well because he is a Lich. Necromancy means conjuring dead and summoning spirits; I don't think people come out of that with child-like intent. If you didn't notice-Liches are some of the most corrupted beings out there, thriving on pain and suffering. I'm not telling you he should drink blood, don a black hood and call himself Lord of the Underworld-not at all! I appreciate your attempt to try to make him more good than evil. In fact I think it could be done, if played correctly-but then I'd be telling you how to fill out your own imagination. I'm only telling you certain things like-darkening his persona-because of the way you told your background.

Then there's your punctuation/spelling/etc. Try looking up a free spell checker on Google/Yahoo that goes on your browser. It helps so much so when you're typing up things, such as a Char. Sheet, and want to look good. Secondly, I know it's a pain rolleyes -but I think most people would enjoy it more if you capitalized you're "I"s and first words of sentences, also capitalizing names of certain objects/places would be nice. Erm, try making sentences, instead of long-drawn out groups of words. Placing periods, commas, and semicolons works fine-just make sure you do it semi-correctly.

You have a wonderful idea for a person! It's just hindered by lack of specificity, spelling errors, grammatical errors, punctuation tardiness, and some ideas that conflict with each other.

[I know this was really long-and you probably hate me for it-but at least I posted something, right?]