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PostPosted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 3:07 am


'Tay me and my buddies have been making this manga for a while now. Reached up to uh.. *checks Microsoft Word* 237 pages! And I practically love it! We decided on the plot together and my twin buddies were the ones who strung everything and voila! Teh manga! Kyah so Imma post a couple of things here and tell me what you think ^^



Characters:

Arumi - Nice, Goody Two-Shoes
Jushime - Cracks up a lot of jokes
Kana - Hot-Headed, Agressive
Nimiko - Cute-like one
Jakumi - Bubbly, Cheerful
Jikumi - Silent


Kairi - Preppy personage
PostPosted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 3:14 am


Camp Bustleweed
4:011 pm (Batch B and D)

The Batches B and D had just arrived and all of the students got out from the bus hurriedly. They were all noisy and excited just as Kana and Nimiko were. Jikumi had no comment on this whole thing.
Suddenly a fat woman got out of a cabin and boomed her way towards the students. Everybody grew quiet.

“My name is Ms. Hobblewick and this is Camp Bustleweed. Here, I’m going to make animals out of you. You will be trained by a lot of outdoor exercises, chores and survival tests.

“Jeez lady” Kana mumbled.
“Chores?!” Nimiko whined.

“Each batch has a cabin and each cabin has rooms. You will stay with your designated teams like glue. Boys separated from girls, I don’t want any monkey business going on… Batches A and…

“Hey Jikumi…” Kana whispered.
“Look at me, I’m Ms. Wobblestick, I’m an animal like all of you.” Kana imitated.

“Kana, shut up! You’re gonna get us in trouble.” Jikumi whispered back.
“Hehehe, that’s sooo funny!” Nimiko giggled.
“I’m wild and sooo fat, you can hunt me down for your survival test!”
“Kana! Shut up man!” Jikumi scolded her.
“Hahahha!!!” Nimiko was laughing now.
“You too Nimiko! Shut up all of you!”
“Oink, oink!!! Hahaha!!!” Kana imitated again.

“Ladies!!!”

Jikumi, Nimiko and Kana stopped. Everyone was looking at them now. Ms. Hobblewick slowly went to them, her eyes fiery.


“I suggest you keep your mouths shut while I’m explaining.” She grunted.
“Or else you will be doing 50 push-ups tomorrow morning.”

She looked at Kana and Nimiko.

“I’ll be keeping an eye on the two of you.” she grunted again.

Then she glared at Jikumi.

“You better watch your friends little Ms.” she told her.

Then she looked at the whole class.

“Specific offenses have specific sanctions. It’s good that these girls just got a warning… Supper starts at 5:00. Move maggots!!!

Everyone was giggling while they left. The girls felt embarrassed.

“Hooray for Kana…” Jikumi said sarcastically.
“Yeah…BUT IT WAS STILL FUNNY!!!!” Nimiko burst out laughing.
“Hahahaha!!!” Kana laughed.
“Did you see her grunt?” Nimiko managed to say between laughs.
“Yeah, she sounded just like a WART HOG!!!” Kana laughed harder.

Jikumi rolled her eyes. She got her bag and started to leave but then she bumped into the worst, vainest, stuck-up in the history of humankind….

“Ouch!!! Watch it! These are my newest clothes!” she screamed.

Her bright pink hair flipped as she turned around to face the doomed culprit.

“Ugh! YOU!!!!”

Jikumi raised an eyebrow.

“Jikumi-chan, you okay?”


Jikumi spun to see her friends jogging towards both of them.


“Nimiko?!”
“What happened here?”
“Your friend just scrunched my baby top sleeve on purpose!!!” she boomed as she pointed accusingly at Jikumi.”

“Kairi, it’s just a small scuff.”
“Don’t you know how much this cost?!!!” she shouted.

“Hey you just can’t shout at her!” Kana defended.
“Was I talking to you?”
“Oh wait……you’re that loser who’s partners with me on the list.”
“Oh you wish…..” Kana muttered as she tightened her fist
“Enough.”

Jikumi turned to Kairi

“I heard scuffs make you look fatter”

Kairi shot her a disgusted face and flipped her hair.

“Whatever.”

She then started to walk away with her friends and flipped her hair again.

“Dorks.”

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PostPosted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 3:16 am


Just a little thing....


“This is all your fault!” Kairi screamed at them.

She was covered with green goo. Never mind thinking where that came from.

“You should look at a mirror.” Kana laughed.
“This wouldn’t happen if you just left us alone.” Arumi joined in.
“Hahaha, you look just like my brother’s handkerchief.” Jushime joked.
“After, he sneezed on it.”



Another little thing >.>

The girls picked a log for all of them to sit together. When everyone was settled in, Ms. Hobblewick stood up and said….

“TO ALL OF YOU SAVAGES, I JUST WANT ALL OF YOU TO KNOW….”
“HOW MUCH YOU MONGRELS MEANT TO ME…”

Ms. Hobblewick stopped and sobbed.

“Ugh!! Get on with it woman!!!” Kana called out.
“Kana-chan, she’s having contact with her sensitive soul…” Arumi explain.

“Whatever!!! Where’s the food and games??!!!”
“Yeah, where’s the rodeo band??” a guy called out.
“Yeah what he said!!!” another one added.

“YEAH, YEAH ALL RIGHT!!!” Ms. Hobblewick boomed.

“Finally!!!” someone called out.

Ms. Hobblewick eyed him.

“EHEM… AS I WAS SAYING, BECAUSE IT”S YOUR LAST DAY HERE… I JUST WANNA SAY….”

“Here we go again…” Kana complained.

“UGH!!! HERE’S THE STUPID RODEO BAND!!!”
PostPosted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 3:23 am


Oh oh! Last one! Maybe xD
I really didn't want to open up the real story to this thing ^^



* I’m not baby-sitting her!!!!!!!!!!!*

*So is it okay??*
*NOOOO!!!* ~ Kana, Jakumi and Jushime

*Okay?!!!*
*Sasuke spilling my hair with milk is okay, Sasuke putting gum inside my shoes were okay, but her?! Compared to her his pranks were a joy!!!*


*She’ll boss us around!!!* ~ Jakumi
*Make us carry her stuff!!!* ~ Kana
*Worse… she’ll brag about them!!!* ~ Jushime

* Arumi-chan…?*

*Oh my god…I cracked a nail!!!*

*No way…*
*Well…I…I…*

*Well I…*


Present time:

“CHESTER!!!!!!!!!!!!! GET ME SOMETHING BEAUTIFUL!!!!!”

“Sorry guys, Kairi-chan can’t resist going to the mall…” Nimiko smiled.

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PostPosted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 3:31 am


Tay remember.. The REAL story isn't even there lol Just posting SOME parts to see what you guys think about it ^^ I'm not even giving out who Kairi really is.. Nor the girls.. So yeah... Hope you liked it ^^
PostPosted: Mon Jul 09, 2007 8:04 pm


lol ya is good!!!! i'm making a manga too (basic from the story of Vega and Althair.) i don't make it with my computer but with all i have at home..it so hard and is so long to make it!!! one day i should give you a part of my manga...you can tell me wat you think about it!! anyway, good luck for the future story!!

W h i t e B a l l a d


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PostPosted: Tue Jul 10, 2007 2:33 am


    Waa cool!
    Vega and Althair.. I have no idea what that is lol

    I wanna read it!! ^^
    Hard? o.o Why?

    Oh and thankies! ^^
PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 3:00 am


-In teh camp-


“What about this one then???” Kana shouted placing the streamer up
“A little to the right!!!!” Jakumi shouted back
“Ahhh come on….” Kana whined.

As the three were talking (( Jushime's with them )) Nimiko approached them wearily as she was carrying a big pile of curtains.

“Neh…Jushime-chan, what do you think? This curtain or this curtain?” Nimiko asked showing Jushime both curtains up.

“Well, they both look festive, don’t you think?" Jushime said eyeing both fabrics.

“I think the yellow and orange one should go together beautifully.” Jakumi smiled.

“Really? Well I guess it’s ok but don’t you think that’s a little too bright?” said Jushime, looking back at Jakumi.

“Well I think it’s cute.”
“What about this?” Kana asked
“A little to the top and wind it a little bit," said Jakumi to Kana.
“Please…..”
“Um….Nimiko, what about combining everything together?” said Jushime, turning back to Nimiko
“Everything?”
“It should add up the stage color.”
“Ohh…ok.”

“Everything? How gross can you get?!”

The four of them turned to see Kairi with her friends coming towards them.

“Great….just who we need..” Kana said, rolling her eyes.
“Kairi-chan? What are you doing here?”
“I’m assigned to supervise you dweebs.” Kairi smiled as she showed them her checklist. ”If I don’t like it, you have to do-over.”

“What the?! Who do you think you are?”
“Well that’s easy, Kairi Rimoryu, the prettiest girl in the world.”
“I think I’m gonna barf.” Jushime whispered.

“These curtains shouldn’t be mixed together. Any girl with the right fashion sense should know that.” Kairi said, eyeing the fabrics as she gave a disgusted look

“Ni-chan, get something pink. Everybody knows that pink is the cutest color. Besides, it adds glamour.”

“This isn’t a fashion show Kairi. Pink doesn’t even reflect the stage.”
“Nor does every color of the rainbow.” Kairi shot back.
”Don’t talk to Jushime like that!” Jakumi blurted.
“Uhh…I didn’t remember inviting you in this conversation.” Kairi flashed her a cold look.

Jakumi lowered her head in embarrassment.

“Now move it Nimiko!”
“Hey stop pushing Nimiko around!” said Kana
“Uhhh….whatever. I can do anything I want.”
“Why...I oughtta……”
“Oh, I just forgot, I have plenty more work to do.” Kairi looked at her watch.
“Good, so get out of here.”

Kairi rolled her eyes and flipped her hair. She looked at Nimiko and gave her a disappointed stare. She then started to walk away and stopped as she turned to Kana.

“Oh, by the way, a little to the left please, it looks like a tree vine.” Kairi remarked and walked away.

- - - - - - -

God, Kairi's a moron >>


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PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 3:03 am


“I wonder if Arumi-chan and Jikumi-chan are having a better time…” ~ Jushime

-----------------------

“The tikis go this way and all torches must be aligned to form a pathway leading to the platform…” said Jakumi, pointing to a corner of the area.

“Like this?” a camper asked.

“No, I said aligned… not forming a cascade…”

“Why does it have to be aligned?!” a girl complained.

Jikumi gave her a threatening stare.


“Ehem… it’s because sorcerers during the 5th century make shrines to perform all sorts of witchcraft and invocations for demons. Aligned torches lead them to the shrines which signify eternality….”

“Geez…” the girl mumbled.
“Freak…” said another one

Jikumi rolled her eyes.
PostPosted: Thu Jul 12, 2007 3:29 am


It was a beautiful Sunday morning and the girls were in the mall shopping. It was already the last day of summer and the girls thought that malling will make their last day memorable.

“Yeah, it looks good on you!” Kana complimented.
“You really think so? Do you think it’s nice?”
“It suits you Nimiko-chan, you should buy it…” Kana smiled.

“This dress is perfect for Nimiko-chan!!!” Jakumi said as she held both of her friend’s hands.
“I dunno…she looks like a cross section of a sweet potato…” Jushime laughed.

Nimiko was wearing an light orange dress just above the knees. It has a collar and two puffy sleeves and prints of colorful patterns were in the right side of the dress.

“Wahhh!!! Jushime-chan has a point!!!”
“No I think it’s perfect, it matches your hair perfectly!!!” Jakumi said cheerfully.

Nimiko turned to Arumi and Jikumi.

“Do you really think it’s nice on me?”

“You look cute whatever you wear...” Arumi smiled.
“Actually you look like a carrot…”


“AHH!!! I don’t like this dress!!!”

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