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The Doc (actual name: Renquii Troxxan) -- Please comment

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Doc Pepoluan

PostPosted: Mon Jul 02, 2007 11:04 am


I would very much appreciate if anyone will comment on my character, to make it better for RP-ing.

I will even more appreciate if someone can point me out to an Open/Recruiting RP where my character fits.

Thank you for your attention. Now, THE CHARACTER:

Name: The Doc (his nickname; real name Renquii Troxxan [RAN-KWEE TROG-ZAN])

Gender: Male

Age: 20-something (see additional information below)

Height: 175cm

Weight: 75 kg

Eye Color: Dark Brown

Hair: Straight, slightly wavy hair, colored jet black with a white streak above his left ear

Skin Tone: Tan

Face: Kind of like Asian/Caucasion cross-breed

Personality: He is kind of an introverted guy, keeping many things to himself, especially his burden. He likes to spend time alone, looking at the stars, or reading books. Definitely not one to take to a bash or anything wildly fun (and he would most likely turn you down if you offered to take him there).

But he's a friendly person. Anyone can come to him with his/her problems, and he'll gladly supply a hearing ear, offering sympathy to others. Yet, though he'll symphatize, he seems to maintain a distance from the opposite gender.

He dislikes physical combat, preferring to be on the rear line. In fact, he hates weapons, and is very clumsy with bigger firearms. But if the occasion calls for it, he is by no means a coward, and will rise above and beyond the call of duty if need be.

He cares about his comrades a lot, sometimes springing into action without much thinking about his own good.

His only weakness is that he is easily depressed when he sees people in romantic relation, for reasons that he can't understand.

Bio (character's history): He had an accident and lost all memories of who he was, what he was, and all. He doesn't even realized his skills & powers, although as time goes by he learns about them and also learns how to control them.

Skills: Medic, also equipped with Healing Power for others and himself. Later on, he'll discover his Telekinetic Shockwave and Flying.

His healing power can heal people's wounds, but if the person is near-death, he must apply it intensively, and even the wounds may not completely healed.

With his Telekinetic Shockwave, he can knock out a person from 5m, or disarm an enemy from 10m. If applied intensely, he can knock out a group of person surrounding him from 3m.

Flying is actually the application of telekinesis to his own body. He can fly to an altitude of 100m (3'000 ft), but there oxygen is thin; he must wear an oxygen mask or he'll pass out. He can easily fly a distance of 10km without much effort, but longer distances require intense application.

Every usage of his power drains his strength somewhat. Light applications usually just drain a tiny bit of his power, nothing that a one-minute rest can't cure. But intense applications will exhaust him, and if he's already exhausted, he may pass out.

Additional Information (optional): The Doc is actually not human; he's actually an alien coming from the Andromeda Galaxy, transported by an accident. He's originally Vice Commander (approx. Lt. Col.) Renquii Troxxan, a medical officer with the Royal Empire Starfleet of the Sequant Empire in the Andromeda Galaxy.

During a battle with the Axxele Empire, his carrier exploded. Many of his fellow soldiers escaped safely, but his schooner was trapped in the Jumpdrive field (triggered by the explosion), and it was tele-transported to earth (or wherever the RP is taking place), where it crashlanded. During the crash, he banged his head badly, and despite his healing powers, he lost his memory. He can't remember everything, but he has a nagging feeling that his place is not on earth, and that there's someone waiting for her. These reasons make him keep his distance (may change with the RP).

As a self-healing alien, his age is actually 124 earth-years. And yes, his race can fly (by performing telekinesis on themselves). His wings (see image below) are mechanical, designed to balance him in flight.

Image (optional):
( see my avatar, I'm still yet to have someone draw me my avatar )

After he regained use of his powers (left: Air Mode, center: Ground Mode, right: Ground Mode version 2):

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PostPosted: Mon Jul 02, 2007 11:57 am


No comments?

Doc Pepoluan


Zant5976

PostPosted: Mon Jul 02, 2007 4:54 pm


it's an ok profile. but i think if using his abilities drains his strength, i would think his powers would be alot more powerful instead of just healing powers, telekinetic shockwaves and flying. other than that, he looks ok
PostPosted: Mon Jul 02, 2007 5:07 pm


nothing spectacular but i agree the pwrs need to be more well... powerful if he's gonna use his strength up

X_All That Never Was_X


Doc Pepoluan

PostPosted: Tue Jul 03, 2007 3:05 am


Okay, thanks for the inputs.

Hmm... I may be too harsh to my chara, as I don't want to do godmodding.

Maybe I will reduce the energy requirement, depending on the strength of the telekinesis / healing, i.e. if it was a 'light' shockwave/healing, his strength is not totally drained, but if it was an 'intense' shockwave/healing, then his strength will be drained considerably.

And flying will be considered 'light' telekinesis, unless it is performed over a great distance, like 50km or greater.
PostPosted: Tue Jul 03, 2007 1:18 pm


All,

I've updated the character profile up there, explicitly stating that any application of Renquii's power will sap some strength, but only intensive applications will exhaust him.

So, in effect, he can use his powers several times in a row without being exhausted. Only if he really pushes, then he will become exhausted.

Any other inputs on this character?

Oh, and a leader to a fitting RP will also be appreciated wink

Doc Pepoluan


Euphoric Ghost

Kawaii Cub

PostPosted: Tue Jul 03, 2007 2:37 pm


"Face: Kind of like Asian/Caucasion cross-breed."

Umm, I feel that Asian or Caucasian aren't breeds, and Asian is a very broad term, I mean people from Easter Russia, India and neighboring countries are considered Asian. Maybe you could just write a couple of sentences that describe his face.

Powers, I feel that he's got too much? Unless the rest of his world has powers that are as strong as his.

The additional information section can be moved to the bio section. That is a part of his history. The history may pose a problem to certain RPs as well since RPs may not accept the existence of aliens or empires in other galaxies.
PostPosted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 1:14 pm


Euphoric Ghost
"Face: Kind of like Asian/Caucasion cross-breed."

Umm, I feel that Asian or Caucasian aren't breeds, and Asian is a very broad term, I mean people from Easter Russia, India and neighboring countries are considered Asian. Maybe you could just write a couple of sentences that describe his face.
Heh, forgive my misuse of the word. Hm, I'll see how I can rewrite it.

Euphoric Ghost
Powers, I feel that he's got too much? Unless the rest of his world has powers that are as strong as his.
Actually yes; everyone of his alien race has the same powers.

Euphoric Ghost
The additional information section can be moved to the bio section. That is a part of his history. The history may pose a problem to certain RPs as well since RPs may not accept the existence of aliens or empires in other galaxies.
Okay, will do. Yes, I am aware of the 'alien' problem, which is why it's kinda hard to find an RP that matches this character. Oh, well.

Doc Pepoluan

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