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 Posted: Thu Jun 28, 2007 9:17 pm
A Dark Time for Poetry
By Daniel Partington
It is a dark time for poetry
Angels now quiver at the sound
Souls are rampart, minds uncultured
The mind’s ear now bleeds
And the eye is now shut
For none can save, nor do they try
Instead they twist it and skewer it
With empathy scarce
Should this be the end?
Will one soul of passion resurrect?
Whether it will or it won’t
We cannot know now
But of this we can surely be sure
That for poetry, this is a dark time indeed
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Posted: Sat Jun 30, 2007 8:00 pm
The man in the dark,
He looks at the poetry,
Not sure he agrees.
There once was a man on the net,
He posted a distressing poem, and intended for people to fret.
Though it twas not a bore,
Valgron yelled at that whore,
And he hasn't replied yet.
But honestly, I like the poem, but don't agree with it.
Well, you would have to define "Modern", but otherwise, I don't agree with it.
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Posted: Sun Jul 01, 2007 11:56 am
Valgron Sairus The man in the dark,
He looks at the poetry,
Not sure he agrees.
There once was a man on the net,
He posted a distressing poem, and intended for people to fret.
Though it twas not a bore,
Valgron yelled at that whore,
And he hasn't replied yet.
But honestly, I like the poem, but don't agree with it.
Well, you would have to define "Modern", but otherwise, I don't agree with it. Yeah, I know what you mean. I wrote it quite a while ago when I was pissed off about a piece of literature I read. I don't agree with it as much as I did then, but I still liked it, so I thought to post it and see what people think
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Posted: Tue Jul 03, 2007 3:00 pm
Alright.
I can understand where it's coming from, now. And if it had been a little more specific, as if hinting towards one poem or writing in particular, I would have thought better of it.
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Posted: Fri Jan 25, 2008 7:20 pm
I do generally agree with your theme, although there is also some very good poetry out there.
I think you would communicate the theme better if you had rhyme and a strict meter - it would give it a classic feel. What you have now is modern (free verse) - which is exactly what you are criticizing.
And this line needs to change; it's redundant: "But of this we can surely be sure"
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Posted: Wed Sep 30, 2009 9:06 pm
Isaiah61 I do generally agree with your theme, although there is also some very good poetry out there. I think you would communicate the theme better if you had rhyme and a strict meter - it would give it a classic feel. What you have now is modern (free verse) - which is exactly what you are criticizing. And this line needs to change; it's redundant: "But of this we can surely be sure" Well, if I were to give that 'classic feel', it would kind've ruin the theme -also, redundancy is a tool used in free verse to emphasize. I generally try to shy away from rhyme in my poetry, I save my rhyming schemes for my songs. But then I did write this when I was a freshmen in highschool like six years ago, I might've just been being lazy razz
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