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 Posted: Thu Jun 21, 2007 8:45 pm
"Okay, so I was told that my poetry was unorginal in its word content, incorrectly put together, and poorly rhymed....so I brought my stuff back to you guys here...."
My tears are a thousand oceans of rain,
A million words you said in vain.
Crying as all I can do to express
The hurt you've shown me
I just hope I am not doomed live
With this pain alongside.
To keep it welled up inside
Is already death to me.
How long shall peaceful nights evade my grasp
and nightmare-less nights fill my sleep?
How long shall birds sing effortlessly
to wake me from ages now past?
How long till they leanr acceptance
and let me slip away?
How long shall this pain keep on?
(to torture me forever?)
How long till love evades my all,
no one cares for this block of ice.
How long shall I endure this wrath
of which I don't deserve?
How long till my heart thaws
and my blood runs freely?
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Posted: Wed Jul 04, 2007 8:42 am
I think its cute.
I love the 1st 1
and the 2nd
but the 1st was my fav.
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L3ts S3t Th3 Stag3 OnF1re
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Posted: Thu Jul 05, 2007 6:41 am
I like them both, but the second one seems unfinished to me. But that might be only because you ended it with a question.
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