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 Posted: Sun May 06, 2007 12:01 pm
This is to You
Waiting, Watching Seeing what's True
Meaning to Rest
Failing that Test
Finding what lies in Deep Subconsciousness
People will Find the Time
even I for You, whose done a Crime
Hating every Blink of Your Eyes
wishing one day ill see you with real ties
but This will be The Demise
Everyone hurts Those they Love
like a Spell, Pricking the Heart of A dove
So Please Decide
For ONCE to Cast Away Your Pride
am i Worth it?
what do you think. criticism appreciated.
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Posted: Wed May 30, 2007 5:17 pm
i like it but i have a weakness for things that rhyme so... it sounds like it could almost be a song.
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