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 Posted: Sat May 05, 2007 8:51 am
Arenas (what it can be changed to ^^):
Classic: A flat field with no obstacle, a quite smooth hard surface. Its easy to get a grip on this floor but its very hard to hide in a course such as this. There are 4 statues at each of the corner. Each one has a statue of of a warrior on it. Tall and mighty. Breakable XD.
Grasslands: A large grassy scenario is used here. here everything is highly flammable. No trees, just tall rich green grass.
Jungle: A large jungle scenario with plenty of places to hide and duck about. Beware of some random marshes here. (yeah the Arena is HUGE) Everything is quite flammable too here, but not as much due to the plant life type.
Factory (Fire): The factory is a complete steel arena with fiery machines that constantly hiss and give off some flames from the top. In the center there is a huge furnace type machinery that is quite dangerous to be around O_o;; . this makes it so that battles aren't only limited to the ground. People can leap onto steel platforms and take their battles airborne ^^.
The Frozen Tundra(ice): A completely frozen battlefield with plenty of various frozen obstacles. There is a large ice creating machine frozen underneath the battlefield. Traction on this type of battlefield is almost impossible. (its ice.. duh x_x)
Lost Desert: A giant Sandy battlefield made with its own weather effect of sandstorms. Made to obscure fighters vision and add to the difficulty of moving around. The sand gives you a lil too much traction that is hard to start moving quickly and such.
Cave: Here a giant cave will be formed in the battlefield, darkening players visions and such and a heavy chilly moist cave feeling around them. The playing field is breakable but it would take a lot of strength breaking the power of mother earth's tightly packed rocks.
Sea of Hope: A complete water field with a only 2 islands. Its.. water... not much to say about this : / . Its rather deep, like 20 feet deep.
Abyss:: A complete Dark Aura battlefield. No obstacles but there is a hazy purple mist that lingers around the field. Mainly for those who use dark magic can summon up powerful spells here.
Alchemist Paradise (Junkyard):: A giant Junkyard with many objects Alchemists can use to transfer them into weapons or anything their heart desire ^^; Plenty of hiding spaces here. There are a few conveyor belts about here that are working O_o.
Pearly Gates: The pearly gates is just the Abyss but vice versa. It has a huge Spirit energy floating about for magic and Light users to use to summon Their spells. Very cloudy like here ^^.
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[Teh Phoenix] generated a random number between
1 and 12 ...
4!
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Posted: Sat May 05, 2007 8:52 am
1. Classic
2. Grasslands
3. Jungle
4. Factory
5. Frozen thundra
6. Lost desert
7. Cave
8. Sea of Hope
9. Abyss
10.Junkyard
11. Pearly Gates
12. I get to chose. >D
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Posted: Sat May 05, 2007 8:53 am
Factory (Fire): The factory is a complete steel arena with fiery machines that constantly hiss and give off some flames from the top. In the center there is a huge furnace type machinery that is quite dangerous to be around O_o;; . this makes it so that battles aren't only limited to the ground. People can leap onto steel platforms and take their battles airborne ^^.
Monster: You control the monster, along with your partner. You make it's movements, and what powers it has, what it looks like/size, and so on.
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Posted: Sat May 05, 2007 4:31 pm
All around, the hot machines hissed and popped with their heat. Steam poured from valves, and the abandoned factory seemed to have lost its purpose. To Rikka, this place was very frightening. Dispite the overwelming heat, her entire body shivered, and her skin crawled.
Rikka took to wondering around the heat infested room. She dodged around valves and pipes that had broken off from various places. Soon she was back where she had started, and time seemed to stand still. She looked towards the large furnace, and the fire began to take shape. Rikka let out a gasp of surprise and even screamed, pointing a shaking finger towards the furnace.
A great beast came forth. It had a strong lupine body, although it stood up right like a human being. A great pair of vicious looking horns grew on its head. It's rough fur coat let off hot sparks, and burned red and orange like the embers it had been born from. It gave a toothy grin, showing off pearly white fangs. It let out a deep growl and licked its lips, slowly starting towards the teammates. It was ready to kill, after all; no one had been around in decades. It would be nice to have a little snack.
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Posted: Thu May 10, 2007 3:52 pm
((Alright, I got permission from Phoenix to continue by myself. So, this is the product. I hope you enjoy! Love, Summonergirl001))
The great beast was slowly inching towards Rikka, red hot saliva dripping from it's open mouth. It let out a inhuman howl before it charged, it's powerful muscles rippling under it's fur. The beast swung it's sharp claws at Rikka, slicing deeply into her side. It landed on all four of its feet, licking her delicious blood from its claws. It turned again, it's empty white hot eyes burning with glee. Next it would take off her head. The fire lupine started towards her again, its body swaying like a rabid animal. It was clearly taking its sweet time in finishing off the young girl.
Rikka was scared. She was completely alone in the red hot wasteland, and took off in a run, holding her side. He had not cut deep into her skin, but it stun like crazy. She ducked behind a furnace, listening for the monsters breath. All she heard was the horrid hissing all around her. Rikka looked at the cut, only to find that she had been burned too. She held her hand over it, and started praying quietly. When the pain subsided, she started moving again.
Rikka climbed up a metal ladder. The first time she touched it, she had to remove her hand from the head. Starting slowly upward, she found herself on a steel platform. She looked down, looking for the creature. It seemed to be nowhere around, and she let out a deep sigh of relief. "Oh . . ." Rikka looked down, and swallowed hard. She was so high up.
The creature made its way up the ladder. It let out a bark-like laugh, looming over the mouse of a girl. It did not care for the smell of fear, or even the words she prayed. All it wanted was to tear her limb from limb. The lupine opened it's mouth wide, a light forming at the back of its throat. A great ball of fire form, and shot at great speed at Rikka. He dropped once more to his four legs, and started running towards her.
Rikka turned sharply and held out both her hands. She screamed loudly, so loud that it overwhelmed the angry hissing around her. Tears formed in her eyes, it was hopeless. She was going to be killed by this monster, and would never see any of her friends again. She hoped Ryuu would forgive her. The fire ball danced off Rikka's barrier, much to her amazement. But the monster jumped high over her head. It landed on top of her, biting at her head.
Blood streamed down the side of Rikka' s face, and her right cheek burned. She let out another scream and kicked madly at the monster, connecting with its rib cage. Somehow, Rikka kicked the great brute off her, an onto the platform.
Rikka jumped to her feet, breathing deeply. She whiped away sweat and blood from her face before taking a step back. "Go away!" she cried at the lupine. "Go back to where you came from!" Rikka heard that animals were as afraid of humans as humans were afraid of animals. However, she felt that here was not the case.
The monster struggled to its feet. It was clearly angry now, it's eyes burning red with rage. It charged at Rikka again, it's feet crashing against the metal platform. The lupine opened its jaws wide, aiming right for Rikka's already bruised face.
Rikka turned her face away, holding out her hand to stop the creature. "Please!" she shouted. "Please let it work!" Rikka felt something warm in her chest, and it moved rapidly to her hand. A small white orb formed in her palm, before shooting out as a small white bullet.
The light connected with the wolf, shooting through it's body. The monster yowled in pain, swaying off course. It fell, wrapping it's jaws around Rikka's slender ankle before skidding off the platform, dragging Rikka with it. It's jaws would not lossen, until Rikka kicked the brute hard in the face. It fell towards the bottom floor, howling with burning rage. It landed hard, every bone in its being shattering with impact. It's eyes, once burning with fire; died down to black coals.
Rikka pulled herself up on the platform, tears in her eyes. Her ankle was bleeding profusly, and she was clearly in need of medical attention. Rikka cleared away blood from her eyes and started sobbing. "Ryuu!" she cried. "I really did it, all on my own. Thank you! Thank you for saving me!"
((Done. I hope it wasn't too much to read. Thanks for reading!))
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Posted: Thu May 10, 2007 7:33 pm
Length and Pacing: Good, though I wish you would have used that 3rd post. I know by yourself it's hard though.
General Grammar rules: I did see a few noticeable spelling mistakes, but it wasn't so bad that I couldn't make out the word.
Personality: Loved it! It was just like Rikka. A shy little girl, and I love how you included Ryuu some in her thinking.
Use of Environment: Good! I'm glad you used the platforms and valves and stuff in your posting, I think it helped.
Details: Fairly good, though I think you could have done better killing the monster honestly. sweatdrop
Summonergirl001's final score: 8.5/10
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