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hey everyone, I have an idea for a book but I'm not sure if it is good or not. It is basically a fantasy/mystery book. Its about a teenage girl that has magical powers. She hasn't entirely figured out her powers, but she knows she has them. Her younger brother also has powers, but noone thinks he does. Anyway, The girl's name is Laura and she goes to a school especially made for kids with magic powers. The school she goes to is like a castle and it has been a school for almost almost 30 years. The school had originally been a castle that belonged to the king. The king had a daughter named Eliza who was allowed to live in a room at the back of the castle the king had allowed his cousin; who is now the headmaster at the school; to turn his castle into a teaching place for kids with special powers. Eliza was a little older than Laura when she disappeared. No one knew what happened to her, but there were some people that were suspected of killing her. But there was no proof. The king gave up his power to rule after that and there was never another king since. A few years after Eliza disappeared, the king's cousin got rid of her room to expand the school. Now 30 years later, Laura is discovering new facts about Eliza's disappearence that no one knew about. She is also seeing connections with things that no one else saw. The reason that she has been seeing these things is because of her power; which I'm not gonna say what it is. Um I guess that's all. Sorry for the long description, but I wanted to make sure not to leave anything out. Anyway, I was wondering if anyone could tell me if this sounds like a good idea or not. Thanks.

Sounds like a great idea. One plot twist I thought of was for Laura to find out she IS Eliza. She was magically sealed until the time came for her to do... something... I don't know what that something is. But good luck on it. (Heh, she'd be the heir to the castle) Don't forget to post it in the writer's forum when you're done, need critiquing/feedback or just getting started and want to write your thoughts out. biggrin

I'm going to be brutally honest here -

(1) If you don't handle the main character, as a teenage girl with "special powers", with a great deal of finesse then she's in serious danger of turning into a Mary Sue, especially if she's going to be outsmarting all of her teachers, the other students, etc. re: what happened to Eliza.

(2) The premise of a school for people with magical powers, especially one that is/is like a castle, is very Harry Potter. You'd have to work hard to overcome that.

I'm not saying it'll suck - it has the potential to be a very interesting yarn - I'm just saying that you'll want to make sure the calibre of your writing is up to scratch.

Glory disagrees o.o That isn't even a twist anymore. It's so overused and expected. It would be way more of a twist if that DIDN'T happen.

I really don't like the idea of her going to a magic school. I hate them ~.~ They're so cliche. There's tons of magic school RPs on Gaia. Ick...But I don't completely hate the idea of her going to one if you do it in an interesting way and don't over emphasize the fact that she's at a school. Twist it and make it original, real, interesting.

Make sure you give solid reasons for why Laura doesn't understand her magic, why she's figuring out what happened to Eliza, and why no one thinks her brother has powers. Like...All kids Laura's age don't understand their powers, therefore in your book have lots of growth and struggle to understand the powers. She's figuring out what happened to Eliza because it's been 30 years and the people who done it ( mrgreen ) got careless after so long and thought people have forgotten or stopped caring about what happened to her, i.e. old news. A possibilty for her brother...eh...He likes being "normal," hates magic, had his powers bloom very late so he just hid them.

Or he's evil mrgreen

Had to have a fun one <.<

I dunno ^.^ Just make it good and no cliche-ing! gonk No! no! no! gonk gonk gonk