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 Posted: Wed Apr 25, 2007 2:35 pm
i say go
i tell the girl no
but she refuses
the attempts are useless
i tell him make her go
but all he says is no
so she stays
i love him alot
he is all that i got
she hits on him
my kindness goes dim
i scream leave us be
just him i only need
i messed up in the past
the yelling happend so fast
i say to him make it stop
he says then why did YOU not
my feelings are nothing of importance
because then i will be a hypocrite....
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Posted: Wed Apr 25, 2007 5:56 pm
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Posted: Mon Apr 30, 2007 3:22 pm
would someone comment and just pretend that I matter.....
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Posted: Fri May 11, 2007 2:59 am
WOULD SOMEONE REPLY DAMMNIT!!!!
emo
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Posted: Tue May 22, 2007 1:28 pm
....im gonna quit this friggin guild...
ive had this up for more than a month.....
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Posted: Tue May 22, 2007 2:06 pm
Get the ******** over yourself.
I'll give you points for semi-intelligent approximate rhymes. No verses, though, it's just one constant chunk...
Oh, e. e. cummings, your wild ways with free verse have birthed many that abuse the style.
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Posted: Thu Jun 14, 2007 10:36 pm
It's very hard to follow it, it jumps back and forth so much. I give you props for a couple strong words. Overall, an OK poem. Keep going!
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