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"Wasted Teenage Words"

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MediaclCunt

PostPosted: Sat Apr 21, 2007 3:37 pm


Thoughts?


He's a wasted teenage heart
Impaled into the cement
She's beaten up and broken down
By the words you said but never meant
He doesn't love her and she knows it
But she wants to hear him speak the truth
They say it about him more than her
They're wasted youth
He's a wasted teenage soul
Scratching at his wrist
He's cutting with sharp objects
He believes he won't be missed
They live in a teenage waste land
Where life is far from real
Lies and secrets spread like diseases
And suicide is no big deal
She and he wandering the land
They could care less if they wasted away
So they sit in their rooms with the music so loud
And their parents have nothing to say
PostPosted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 8:00 am


And you -know- you're dreaming,

I like this. A lot. You portray such a sad subject, while keeping the rhyme and rhythm smooth and rather pretty. It's rather like a bitter-sweet song, sung to tingle the senses with the macabre words of the cynic.

It was very nice.


When chaos turns 'serene.'

Devastating-Dreamer


MediaclCunt

PostPosted: Sun Apr 22, 2007 9:58 pm


Devastating-Dreamer
And you -know- you're dreaming,

I like this. A lot. You portray such a sad subject, while keeping the rhyme and rhythm smooth and rather pretty. It's rather like a bitter-sweet song, sung to tingle the senses with the macabre words of the cynic.

It was very nice.


When chaos turns 'serene.'
Thank you.
PostPosted: Thu Apr 26, 2007 3:24 pm


I agree with what Devastating-Dreamer said.
The poem sounds so beautiful even though the subject is so sad.
And the rhythm sounds so pretty and smooth.

Keep up the work.

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Corpse_Bride_131

PostPosted: Sun May 06, 2007 11:33 am


Thats really good. It really hits home with me in a way I don't think you meant it too. Great job. Keep it up. ^_^
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