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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 8:45 pm
Quester Info Username: [Accursed Angel] First timer (y/n): Yes.
Character's name: Coming... Creature: Yamata-no-Orochi Category: Animalistic Elemental type: Water .:Table of Contents:. 1. Quester Information 2. Character Information 3. Yamata-no-Orochi Information 4. Transformation (Maybe) 5. Official Critique Spot
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Posted: Thu Apr 05, 2007 9:02 pm
Name: Samuel Stark Age: 24 Birth Date: April 5, 1976 Birth Place: San Francisco, California, USA. Current Living: San Francisco, California, USA. Gender: Male Race: French and English Blood Type: AB Height: 5'10" Weight: 150 lbs
Personality: ...
Physical Description: 
Family: -Mother: Tammi (49) -Father: Greg (50) -Brother: Chris (17) -Sister: Tanya (16)
History: Samuel was born on April 5, 1976 on a cold and blustery night. He grew up with his mom, dad, brother, and sister. He was a bit older than them, but he got along with them perfectly. He was a great model for them because he was so kind and loving toward them. At home he was a perfect kid. Nothing wrong with him whatsoever. Then when his brother and sister showed up, he kept on doing the right thing.
At the age of fourteen, he began to do bad things with friends. When this happened, he was a freshman in highschool. He would ditch class and go to the movies, he'd play around with girls as if they were his little toys. He used them and manipulated them. But, he kept all that a secret from his little brother and sister, only because he wanted to be that kind of an example. He didn't want to hurt them, but he couldn't get away from this second life he lead. He wanted to badly, but he just couldn't seem to do it.
When he turned 17, he decided to go off to college. He majored in health and wanted to become a doctor. But, he was not the type you'd expect to be the doctor. He was the one that would hate going and almost fist fight for not going. But, he did. At the age of 24, seven years later, he was now a doctor at a local hospital. Still leading that double life, he kept that a secret still from his family. He couldn't break that kind of news to them. Never.
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 7:38 am
Yamata-no-Orochi ("big snake of eight branches"), often called Orochi or the Eight-Forked Serpent in English), is a dragon- or serpent-like creature in Japanese mythology. In the ancient Japanese scripture, the Kojiki, after Susanoo is expelled from heaven, he encounters two earthly deities near the head of the Hiigawa River in Izumo Province. They are weeping because they have had to give the Orochi one of their daughters once every year, and now they must sacrifice the eighth and last, whose name is Kushinada.
The monster is described as having eight heads and eight tails and eyes as red as winter-cherries. It is so long its body extends over eight valleys and eight hills, its belly is always bloody and inflamed, and its back is covered with moss and hinoki and sugi trees.
Susanoo asks for Kushinada's hand in marriage, and then transforms her into a comb which he places in his hair. He then asks her parents to brew some liquor that has been refined eight times, and then build a round enclosure with eight gates, each with a platform and a liquor vat. They fill the liquor vats and wait, and sure enough the Orochi appears. It dips a head into each vat, and is soon intoxicated, allowing Susanoo to cut it into pieces. When he cuts the middle tail, his sword is chipped, and there he finds the legendary Kusanagi sword.
Pictures: [x][x]
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 9:00 am
These are completely formed from me...the artist can do whatever. xD
Stage 1: Just a picture of the man who got there. ^^ Stage 2: Maybe turning green and his head begins to form others? xD Stage 3: Having four of eight heads and four of eight tails. <3 But, I'd like him to keep his body for the most part...just getting bigger/stronger looking/more reptile-like. Stage 4: I guess, this is where he has all eight tails/heads. ^^ So, yeah. But, I would like him to keep his body, making it more muscular, reptile like, and him being able to walk around. xD Since there is no REALLY good picture of Orochi's body...so, yeah. ^^
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Posted: Fri Apr 06, 2007 9:00 am
For the official critique. ^^
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Posted: Sat Apr 07, 2007 2:27 pm
Ok, I'm not the best person at creating a character but there is a lot missing in yours.
Let's break it down.
First, let's go with looks, since you kinda start with that. Write up a physical decription, describe his body type, hair cut, any scars he might have, heck even shoe size if you want to be really detailed. A tip describe him as if he was standng right next to you. What his clothes look like whether they are untucked or in. Does he wear dress shoes or sneakers? Boxers or briefs? Does he wear cologne? Does he wear jewelry? A picture helps but doesn't make the character because a character doesn't look exactly like it's picture counterpart.
Second, Background/history, why did he choose to become a secret badboy? Were his parents involved did he get in with a bad crowd? You mentioned that he couldn't keep living the second life yet he clearly does. Does he ever fall in love, and was his heart broken, that could explain why he womanizes. No child is perfect does he act up a bit? Does he ever get lost does he act out? Your history is a bit bland, what does his parents do? Do they have long working hours, or short? Did one parent stay at home?
How did he feel when his siblings first arrive? Did he feel ignored? Not important? ANd what do you mean by him fighting because he didn't want to do to Doctor school? Was he pressured to go to school by his parents? WHy didn't he drop out if he didn't want to go?
Fill it out more.
Third, how does he get transported? What's the catalyst?
Other than that it's a great start.
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Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2007 5:48 pm
I found a picture of Orochi with his body.
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