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 Posted: Sat Mar 10, 2007 2:48 pm
Love is a beautiful scenery............
Love is more than a dream ...........
Love is reality .................
Love is exciting ...............
But, love can be deceiving.........
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Posted: Sat Mar 17, 2007 9:01 pm
Here I go again, critiquing poetry:
I'm pretty sure that saying "a beautiful scenery" isn't correct. You can't have a scenery. You can have a scene or a picture, but not a scenery.
You have a topic here that everyone does at some point, but with a little twist at the end which makes it somewhat refreshing. But I don't like the . . . at the end of each line. It makes it seem undecided, or hesitant. You're making a statement and should be sure of it.
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