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 Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 5:16 pm
Entering a contest on DevArt, need help making this sketch not so crappy before I even attempt to colour it. xD The prize is like, the last copy of Luciole's art book. <3 Go check it out if you want. Here
Anyways, here it is. Sorry for the faint lines, I left the sketch light so I could change things. 3nodding
Also, I have no idea what that blotch is above the butterfly, must be some gunk on my scanner. D: I changed her position a bit, does she look more elegant now? o: It's not just you, there's no hand there. ):
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 8:25 pm
the butterfly hand looks a tad weird.. but I cant really see it, so it might not be too bad or anything.
overall i think it looks quite nice mrgreen Im not very good at comment&crit
but I know Id be pleased with myself if I drawed something like that 3nodding
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Posted: Thu Mar 08, 2007 8:39 pm
Oh no, that's a competition I'm entering too. *stares at own entry in progress* Dangnabbit!
Anyhow. Improvements? The only improvements I can notice on the sketch are:
The mouth looks a taddish odd. The top lip mostly, how it dips down at the right side a bit far. Just doesn't seem to match up or something.
I think it might be the image tilting a little bit, but the right fabric fall hanging from the top pillar; it seems to be falling a little left of perpendicular. It's defying gravity and bending to the left instead of falling straight down.
Damn gorgeous though
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 9:33 am
The upper arm nearest the viewer is pretty long in comparison to the other arm. I think everything else notable has been mentioned. Could you provide a link to this contest?
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Posted: Fri Mar 09, 2007 10:53 am
T a k a s e: What looks weird about it? The fingers? angle? thumb? I sort of thought the thumb was looking a bit odd myself...
Flimsy: Oh my, really? Good luck! biggrin The mouth, I can fix that. The image is a bit skewed to one side, so it's not just you, and yeah, I actually don't like the drap-y fabric at all, any suggestions to make it look more natural would be much appriciated. 3nodding
The Iconoclast: The arm with the butterfly? Hmm.. Yeah, I see what you mean, that's something that can be fixed when colouring, me thinks'. :3 There's a link in the first post.
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Posted: Sat Mar 10, 2007 6:38 am
I'd second the mouth, in fact I think the face is the weakest point of this- the background looks lovely so far. I'd like to see a slightly longer nose and lower ear to match, and something about the pose just doesn't look very elegant... not sure but I think it might be how far forward her neck is, it needs a little tilt in the head or something to bring back the poise.
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Posted: Thu Mar 15, 2007 10:25 pm
Fixed stuff. Also, anybody have any ideas on colouring this? I was going to try watercolours well, because it's Luciole and I thought it'd make sense-- But then I realized I'm terrible at watercolour. :/
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