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 Posted: Fri Mar 02, 2007 8:40 pm
One night a guy & a girl were driving home from the movies. The girl
sensed there was something wrong because of the painful silence they
shared between them that night. The boy then pull overs
because he wanted to talk. He told her that his feelings had changed &
that it was time to move on. A silent tear slid down her cheek as she
slowly reached into her pocket & passed him a folded note. At that moment,
a drunk driver was speeding down that very same street. He swerved
right into the passengers seat, killing the girl. Miraculously, the boy
survived. Remembering the note, he pulled it out & read it.
"Without your love, I would die."
If that didn't touch you, you need to be killed.
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Posted: Sat Mar 03, 2007 8:28 am
then come kill me because I thought it was funny!
Also I don't understand how a drunk driver can swerve into the passenger seat only and not even harm the boy. Or for that matter hit the passenger only, since the drivers side is the side facing the street.
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Posted: Sat Mar 03, 2007 9:49 am
Don't look at me, I only found it on a friend's profile page.
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Posted: Sat Mar 03, 2007 3:19 pm
Raven_panther One night a guy & a girl were driving home from the movies. The girl sensed there was something wrong because of the painful silence they shared between them that night. The boy then pull overs because he wanted to talk. He told her that his feelings had changed & that it was time to move on. A silent tear slid down her cheek as she slowly reached into her pocket & passed him a folded note. At that moment, a drunk driver was speeding down that very same street. He swerved right into the passengers seat, killing the girl. Miraculously, the boy survived. Remembering the note, he pulled it out & read it. "Without your love, I would die." If that didn't touch you, you need to be killed. Did you want this edited? I guess so here here goes. The basic structure is really bad. You mustn't have the story read like a list. Your verbs are conflicting in tense. The story is so rushed, it's almost insulting to have taken away time to read. Just because you found it on a friend's page doesn't give you the right to post it with mistakes intact. Where's my slayer? I'll give him a grammar punch!
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 11:44 am
stare Ok, one, I asked before I posted it, Two, I NEVER took any credit for it, and three, I DIDN'T WRITE IT. I just copied and pasted. I don't seem to see anything wrong with that. It's not like I stole it.
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 3:27 pm
Gomen. I meant no disrespect. Forgive me!
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Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2007 5:51 pm
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