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Reply 4: The Three R's, (Lit) RP, Reviews, & Reports (Debate/Essays/Creative Writing)
I don't want to be human (the first poem I wrote)

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The_GhostlyGirl

PostPosted: Tue Feb 20, 2007 6:30 pm


I don't want to be human
I kicked and I screamed
I hit and I wailed
"I don't want to be human!!" I yelled
"Why the HELL not??!" they screamed back
"Because we fell!!" I said, a tear lead the trail of others
"From where??" they asked once again
"From Heaven to Hell!!" my spirit yelled
They tighten their grip
And that narrow strip of light fled from view
"Stop! your last drop of blood will drip" they warned
"Never! I would clip my veins again if I grew an hour more!" I through back at them
I kicked and I screamed
I hit and I wailed
"I don't want to be human!!" I yelled
Every thing went black as if enshrouded by a sack
Then came fact: The keeper had come to take me back
I kicked and I screamed
I hit and I wailed
"I don't want to be human!!" I yelled
A faint smile crossed my lips
He grabbed my hips and pulled
I took my last breath in sips
I kicked and I screamed
I hit and I wailed
"I don't want to be human!!" I yelled
Then came serenity,peace,and tranquillity
I knew that my necessity had been for filled
PostPosted: Wed Mar 14, 2007 5:23 pm


o.o hmmm, interesting poem. To be honest, I havent seen one like it before...very good use of words but im afraid it lacks explanation, unless that is what you were going for in the first place. For example, how would the reader understand what you mean by 'I dont want to be human?' Im not meaning to sound like a Literature book mind you ^.^' but it would be helpful if you gave some insight into it. But other than that, I did enjoy your poem. Gave me a bit of inspiration ^.^

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