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It's not the greatest, but it has sentimental value, at least give me that.

Title: I'm All Caught Up In You

Your blue eyes and your smile
Have me flying high for miles
My dreams about you stay a while
I'm all caught up in you.

I watch you from not far away
And I think about you day after day
And I wish that I could only say
I'm all caught up in you.

You make me feel like I could fly
And soar among the clouds so high
If only I had the nerve to try
I'm all caught up in you.

You're my friend, how can it be
That my words seem to fail me?
And I wish that you could only see
I'm all caught up in you.

So I ask myself, "Should I tell you?"
And if I did, what would you do
If the words I said were forever true
"I'm so in love with you"?

Which lines do you think could use some work beyond the "greatness" one. I was actually thinking about changing that too. I was just at a loss for what else to use. Any suggestions you give me will help a lot.

I edited the poem. I took out the whole "greatness" part, and I changed a line otherwise.