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Posted: Sat Feb 03, 2007 6:35 pm

Heyo, The name's Disko - and this is my first submission to the guild thread...I'd love to grab some feedback on my style, and also would love to know if you guys got anything out of my sometimes seemingly random thoughts.

We live in an organized, and graphic world.
All we really have to do is follow the dots, and continue the lines we draw.
If we do, life will be simple, and the picture will be complete.
However, it's the times we choose the wrong dots, that makes life worth living.

Posted: Sun Feb 04, 2007 10:32 am

its a little short, and done more like a rough draft. but it has good stability and maybe with two or more lines added in the middle to make seem more finallized would be great. i like it! biggrin

The Devil Has Eyes

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The Devil Has Eyes

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Posted: Sun Feb 04, 2007 10:34 am

oh and by the way check out my new original story Silver Lake

its anime based, sorta. an anime pic is coming in soon along with more chappies. the first one was written Feb. 3 in case you need to find it.. 3nodding

Posted: Fri Feb 09, 2007 7:19 pm

I really liked this. It was a little short, but I think that's part of what makes it so cool.

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Posted: Sun Feb 11, 2007 5:23 pm

There's a unique truth in this. It's short and to the point, and something I'd expect to see quoted ^^ 10/10

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