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 Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 6:49 pm
tell me what you think of my poem. Give me feed back on what I should do and what you think i could improve on. it is okay if your comment is negitive.
Under the bed there is a faerie
in my eyes it is heaven
when I get a glimpse of heaven
the fearie touches my soul.
Vickie NJ
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Posted: Wed Jan 31, 2007 8:42 pm
The poem is rather short and the imagery is not so fantastic. Try stregthening that imagery; a writer's gift is his ability to turn the physical and spiritual into a form expression that transcends anything that can be formed with the human hands, a feeling and a deep understanding.
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